Book Name: Mulittang

Author: iMeGiNeSoN

Reviewer: ceyshells

Cover: 2/5

Main character, background and font style are well linked to the story. A reader would immediately know who and what the story will be about. Personally, although I like it, it could use a little more pizzazz as it is quite plain due to its brown palette.

Title: 4/5

A really good title with a clear link to the cover. One thing I would recommend would be to put the Korean characters into the title. I noticed you added that in the synopsis, but it would be nice to add that in the title as well. Consistency is key, especially with the title.

Synopsis: 7/10

I like the way the author writes the blurb. It's a poetic way that shows the story line, yet uses no story information. However, one downfall of using this style is that readers can become confused by it, and could misunderstand the meaning behind it. Despite being a writer who's guilty of writing blurbs in this style, I was a bit confused while reading it. It might help if the sentences are split into separate lines so their context can be taken in individually rather than in a block paragraph.

Execution: 6/10

Aesthetically, this book definitely lives up to expectations. There is also an aspect of creativity to the overall outlook of the story. However, I personally feel the story itself is lacking in some aspects.

Plot: 9/20

As a reviewer, I feel horrible when I have to say that I could not understand a book, but it has to be said. Initially, I really enjoyed the story. It was kind of cute seeing a boy staying in a flying saucer that serves as his mother, trying to figure out how to find his father who he lost.

Where I started feeling lost about the plot was when the story changed to a diary style, both showing Kai's and the narrator's perspective. It became difficult to follow, and if it weren't for the explanation and small revelation at the end, I would not have been able to understand what happened at all.

Overall, it was an interesting and unique story, but I would have liked it more if I could immediately understand what was happening.

Writing Style: 11/20

The author writes in a way that carries meaning, which is good, but also runs the risk of being confusing. Unfortunately, the latter incident happened quite a few times as I was reading this book. Another issue I picked up on was the usage of "but" and "and" as the starting words of sentences. This does not apply to everyone, but for me, starting a sentence with these two words isn't ideal. They make good words to connect two sentences, but do not work well as sentence starters.

The point of view jumps from Kai's perspective to a third person, but overall it is quite consistent throughout the book.

Grammar & Vocabulary: 11/20

Not a consistent error, but there are instances of tense changes in the story. Other than this, there are some sentences that make no sense due to the way it is phrased. Additionally, there are quite a number of run-on sentences.

Tense changes and run-on sentences can be corrected by reading out loud. If the sentence has a weird rhythm or awkward feel to it, there usually is something wrong with a tense or a lack of commas.

The mistakes I've stated above are scattered throughout the story, so I would recommend thoroughly editing your work.

The vocabulary used is quite varied and interesting. However, there are a number of words that are misspelled. It is good to have a large vocabulary, but misspelling the word shows a lack of knowledge on the word itself.

Character Development: 6/10

There are only three characters mentioned in the story: Kai, Mi and Kai's father. His mother is mentioned briefly but not elaborated on.

Kai is a boy with a rebellious and stubborn nature. He is prone to talking back and doing what he wants without listening to his "mother". I believe the elaboration on his personality and feelings come in the form of the diary chapter which I did not understand, so I can't give any more information on this aspect.

Mi, short for Mi Casa, is a flying saucer whom Kai lives in. She essentially functions as Kai's mother, taking care of him and talking to him as a mother would. Based on what I was able to pick up, she might have died (?) in the water. She has a personality despite being a machine, mainly as a naggy mother/sister. It was interesting to see the way she acted since she doesn't have the features to portray emotions.

Kai's father is not physically present in the story, but his presence exists in the form of voice messages. It is later revealed at the end that he is Kai's future self, Jin. However, not much is relayed about his feelings.

Total: 56/100

Additional: Hello @iMeGiNeSoN , thank you for submitting your work for review. I'm glad that I had the opportunity to read your story. I hope you will take my comments and use them to improve your book further. Feel free to pm me for clarifications.