Author's Name: -Yoonshooky

Book Title: Did It For Gucci

Reviewer: Anika (@FrozenHeartsGalaxy)

• TOTAL MARKS- ①⓪⓪

|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʀᴇᴀᴅᴇʀ ɪɴᴛᴇʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ.

-3/5

The number of interactions between the author and reader are minor, hence all the feedback is positive.

|- 10 ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴄᴏᴠᴇʀ.

-4/10

The book cover gives sci-fi vibes at first glance because light blue font colour and style is commonly used in sci-fi genres, as well as white transparency too. But the colour combination of blue and red look attractive. The background photo of Taehyung have red and blue shades while red colour is used for the other information such as Author's name, quote and few line designs at two corners and middle is pretty creative. The position of every font, choice of image and design is good. The cover doesn't look relevant to the plot, the image of Taehyung looks dominant but in plot Jungkook is playing the role of dominant most. The cover didn't give off supernatural or scary vibes. I suggest the author add carnival with scary bunny Jungkook, it will look more eye-catching, attention-grabbing and would also match the plot and mood.

|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴅᴇsᴄʀɪᴘᴛɪᴏɴ.

-3/5

The description is short but it tells a short summary about the plot, leaving the cliffhanger. It also gives insight that the plot is based on the horror genre. The cliffhanger, plot and the fact there lives a haunted bunny in the carnival is very thrilling and that won't stop curious viewers to dive inside the story to find out what happened next. Make sure to give space after ellipses (...). It sounds very unrealistic that someone will accept the dare of staying 2 days without food and clothes in an abandoned carnival and the person who gave the dare sound very wild.

|- 10 ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴛɪᴛʟᴇ.

-8/10

The title seems different from the cover and description. It gives humour vibes instead of horror but if the cover was scary, the cute or humour title mood will totally change to horror. Hence the plot does match the title. Write letter (f) of "For" in capital.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴘʟᴏᴛ.

-10/10

The title is very rare, it portrays true friendship/relationship even after the death. It also shows how scars and painful memories are still fresh for some people. Taehyung who wanted gucci bag accepted dare of his friends and went inside haunted carnival and that's when he finds out secrets and his past life as well. 

•|- ②⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴛʜᴇ ɢʀᴀᴍᴍᴀʀ ᴀɴᴅ ᴠᴏᴄᴀʙᴜʟᴀʀʏ.

-17/20

Your grammar and vocabulary is perfect but there are minor mistakes in ellipsis, punctuation and spelling mistakes. After the prologue, I mentioned chapters as 1, 2 and 3. I hope you understand.

Punctuation:-

1. Prologue,

when was the last time he felt that . It's been a while

Reviewer:- You gave space before fullstop. It was noticeable.

2. Chapter 3,

"W-wait!," Taehyung shouted

Reviewer: Don't add comma after exclamation mark.

3. Chapter 4,

"Now what?", he voiced out.

Reviewer: Don't add comma after quotation mark.

4. Chapter 4,

"I am just kidding!," 

Reviewer: Same mistake.

Ellipses:-

You should add only 3 dots (...) to indicate nervousness or trailing off. Less or more than that isn't allowed. Here is the list of the mistakes you have done in that case.

1. Chapter 2,

"Yes.." He whispered quietly with hasitence.

2. Chapter 2,

"Why...do you haunt this place,"

3. Chapter 3,

Curiosity killed the cat, but Taehyung was no cat.....or was he?

4. Chapter 4,

"Hyungie, it's cold.."

5. Chapter 6,

"Jeongguk.."

6. Chapter 6,

"How..? No no, it can't be.." Taehyung murmured

Spelling mistakes:-

1. Chapter 5,

Taehyung grunted and rubed his eyes with closed fists and yawed

Correction:- "rubbed" and "yawned"

2. Chapter 5,

Taehyung noded at Jeongguk's words

Correction:- "nodded"

Chapter 6,

Taehyung's question and Jeongguk noded

Reviewer: Same mistake

Chapter 7,

As the other pated his back, letting him cry and wet his onesie. 

Correction: "patted"

Vocabulary:-

You vocabulary is good and I found some sentence which seemed a bit off.

1. Chapter 5,

Prepared him himself for the act.

Reviewer: You mentioned "him" twice.

2. Chapter 5,

and mentally to face palmed himself.

Reviewer: adding "to" wasn't necessary.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs Fᴏʀ ᴘʟᴏᴛ ᴛᴡɪsᴛs ᴀɴᴅ ᴀᴛᴛʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ.

-9/10

Disclaimer,

The author is really good with quotes, the first quote really shook the reader's heart including mine. It gives off psycho vibes.

Prologue,

It made me even more thrilled and excited when Taehyung already knew about carnival bunny so hence it must be famous rumours. I love how the author wrote that in italic font. The prologue ending is amazing, the way you narrate that he flashed his smile last time and the quote "And the adventure filled with untold mysterious and thrilling events begins" excites the readers

Chapters,

I love Jungkook's entry, it was too soon but it was amazing and scary at the same time. I first thought Jungkook opening about his past was way too early and rushed but when I found out Taehyung was the same past friend then It seemed understandable (That was biggest plot twist) I thought Taehyung left Jungkook in cage but after knowing he screamed for Jungkook and had cardiac arrest was unexpected and sad. 

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴇᴍᴏᴛɪᴏɴs ᴀɴᴅ ᴄʜᴀʀᴀᴄᴛᴇʀ ᴅᴇᴠᴇʟᴏᴘᴍᴇɴᴛ.

-10/10

Prologue,

Taehyung's innocent gif at first made my heart heavy thinking horrifying things gonna happen to him in upcoming chapters. I love how the author made the readers feel at the beginning of horror genre story. 

Chapters,

Taehyung walking inside with a torch made readers feel all kind of fear for upcoming events that were going to happen to him, it made me feel at edge and I was holding my breath while reading it. The recently drawn painting was scary and creepy too. I love how you describe Taehyung's thoughts regarding reality and dreams of monster chasing him and bad deeds. I pitied him even in these tense moments but the author is really great at making the readers rollercoaster of different emotions, first tense, horror, scared, pity and then I laughed when it was just a cat. I love how you narrate the cat telling him to get out of here. Jungkook's change of mood and demeanor was unexpected and funny. The fact he can hear all thoughts and sense all fear made me think what he is. This story made me feel sad too, It's so sad that they didn't saved him from fire and it's been so many years but the pain is still fresh

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴄʀᴇᴀᴛɪᴠɪᴛʏ ᴀɴᴅ ᴡᴀʏ ᴏғ ᴡʀɪᴛɪɴɢ.

-10/10

Your writing skills are so detailed, smooth, understandable and easy to read. I was able to picture every scenario and feel different kinds of emotions through your writing skills. Taehyung's description of fears, thoughts and his desires of the Gucci bag wasn't cliche at all. I love how you wrote that he sees carnival nothing less than a set for a horror movie while standing there. I'm in love with your description of painting Jungkook drawn, mixed with horror too.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʏᴏᴜʀ ᴏᴘɪɴɪᴏɴ ᴏɴ ᴛʜᴇ ʙᴏᴏᴋ.

-9/10

Your story is really good and I enjoyed reading it a lot. You are truly a great and talented author, I was shocked that not many people have read this book. Do follow the suggestion I gave about the book cover, the cover must look rare just like the plot to attract multiple readers. The design is common and simple that's why readers don't click it. 

Total Masks: 83/100