Book:- His Baby Boy| 18+|

Author:- KINGA61313

Rev:- Seokie

TOTAL MARKS- ①⓪⓪


|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʀᴇᴀᴅᴇʀ ɪɴᴛᴇʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ.
~ 5/5
Readers are impressed by the work you have put up in your book. When I was going through the comment sections in your book that time I got the feeling that you were able to connect your characters' emotions with the reader's emotions and that's worth praising.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴄᴏᴠᴇʀ.
~ 3/10
Well, the cover was not at all eye-catchy. I only see a man who did not even give me the feeling of Jimin or our babyboy Kook. It looks more like a red light area picture. Mind you, you will lose marks because of the wrong face claim.
You could have gone with a dark and light theme colour combination for your cover along with some quotes to create the vibe and face claim of Jikook or either of Jimin.
Overall, I suggest you change the cover for your book to catch readers at first sight.

|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴅᴇsᴄʀɪᴘᴛɪᴏɴ.

2/5
I see no attention-catching words or writing in this book blurb. It's the same and common as any other rich men story in Wattpad.
Even the way you have written the description with no space and hint of suspense has made it ordinary than it should have been, you could have used good quality vocabulary for this part as you know this part plays a vital role in attracting readers.

|-  ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғor ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴛɪᴛʟᴇ.
~ 2/10
There are tons of book swimming in Wattpad with the same name as yours. I think you could have been more creative with your book title. Your book title looks bland and too simple for anyone's liking. And think about a reader who wants to read your book and she or he searches the name but when the results came to your book was nowhere over there, well that what happened with me. I searched your book title and found different books with the same book title.
So, it's for your good, you should change your book title.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴘʟᴏᴛ.

~6/10
I did like the plot although it was a cliche at some part.
The starting, as well as the end, was quite predictable though.
But I liked how you ended it. The tragic scene at the end of the story looked original as you did not end it up like a fairytale ending. Jimin was a strong man but at some point in time life break us all and about Jungkook's love I felt soft. But I will put a criticism that you have added too many characters which confused me a little.



|- ②⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴛʜᴇ ɢʀᴀᴍᴍᴀʀ ᴀɴᴅ ᴠᴏᴄᴀʙᴜʟᴀʀʏ.
~ 5/20
I did not like the grammatical mistakes present in your book mostly in all chapter. It destroyed the impression. If you don't check this part you will lose readers. I have pointed out some parts of your work where you need to work.
"Since has to live up many expectations" here 'to' is missing and 'he' is missing

"And don’t speak like that you know you will be here when my children are born just wait a while please." here you should have used a 'comma' before please or it will get counted as grammatical errors.

"He did not feel like cleaning another body this week so he decided interrupt" ~ You again missed the preposition ‘to'

"I may be gay, but I am not those gay twinks you fine in the streets of Seoul!" you made a typo here change ‘fine' with ‘find'

"Bur if you think you can come here and call me a slut than you are dead wrong old man." Typo again uses ‘But’ instead of ‘Bur’ and use ‘a’ as an article before dead.

Moving to the vocabulary part of your story. According to me, I did not found any using high-quality words in your story. Well, a piece of writing looks beautiful with the proper use of perfectly good quality vocabulary.

- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs Fᴏʀ ᴘʟᴏᴛ ᴛᴡɪsᴛs ᴀɴᴅ ᴀᴛᴛʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ.
~ 8/10
Well, I loved the roller coaster ride although the last was predictable. The plot twist kept me going.


|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴇᴍᴏᴛɪᴏɴs ᴀɴᴅ ᴄʜᴀʀᴀᴄᴛᴇʀ ᴅᴇᴠᴇʟᴏᴘᴍᴇɴᴛ.
~ 3/10
I did not get attached to the characters' feeling. I did not felt bad at the point where Kook dies or Jimin breaking down. It happened because of the lack of proper usage of grammar along with a cliche plot. Unless for the first part of the story where Jimin lost his dad.

①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴄʀᴇᴀᴛɪᴠɪᴛʏ ᴀɴᴅ ᴡᴀʏ ᴏғ ᴡʀɪᴛɪɴɢ.
~2/10
I did not find any creative part in your story. You need to play with your words to create that impression.



|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʏᴏᴜʀ ᴏᴘɪɴɪᴏɴ ᴏɴ ᴛʜᴇ ʙᴏᴏᴋ.
~ 5/10


Total Marks- 41/100

🆈🅾🆄🆁 🆁🅴🆆🅸🅴🆆 : Change the book cover along with the title. Make the book blurb more creative. I will ask you to re-check your work before publishing your chapters to avoid grammatical mistake. And please don't forget to play with your words.





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