Book Name: Kiss to Marriage

Author: and_sprite023

Reviewer: Bun _wxld_thxstle_

Cover: 1.5/05
The cover isn’t really attractive; it doesn’t really go with the theme of the book. The font is barely visible, and it’s blending with the background too much. The editing isn’t nice either; nothing more than two pictures together with minimal editing done on them.

I suggest you change the cover, maybe take some help from the graphic shops.

Title: 02/05
Though the title is very accurate, it is not interesting.
It’s too basic and plain for the book. Though the book starts off with the kiss and the marriage order, it is not the only thing which the book is about. The book holds many othe twists and turns, along with some other concepts which could’ve been highlighted through the title.

In Conclusion, I would say that the title should be more creative and new than bland and simple, since it’s something which attracts readers a lot.

Synopsis: 0.5/10
There isn’t much to review here; the synopsis is nothing more than a couple of lines which don’t really make one interested in the book.

So you see, synopsis is actually very important, because it gives a brief insight about the book and it’s concept, it’s story plot or characters. It should be interesting and relevant to the book, which can make someone get intrigued with your book.

So I suggest you change the blurb and replace it with a well-written blurb.

Execution: 04/10

The execution of a book is really important and crucial in forming one’s story; it actually defines your skills and comminitates the story to the readers. It conveys the correct idea and emotion to the readers.

In your case, the execution wasn’t really nice.

It made the book seem considerably bland and simple. It also confused me at some points.
I suggest sticking to one format, or flipping through the flashbacks in a proper manner.

Use one point of view, or use the various povs with a proper reason to use them.
Usually, the author’s pov is used to give a descriptive and illustrative idea. The character’s pov is used to express their emotions and thoughts. So, you have to decide what you want to express and then use the pov.
But it wasn’t so in your book.

The author’s point of view was used throughout the story, originally. But suddenly, you seem to switch to the characters’ point of view. It is fairly confusing.
Also, the characters’ point of view aren’t really interesting either. They should’ve contained more emotions and expressions, should’ve conveyed what exactly went through the mind of the character, but it was not so.

I suggest improving the execution by improving on the

Plot: 13/20

The plot is fairly beautiful.

Writing Style: 12/20

Writing style is really important for an author, since it makes their book stand apart from others.
Also, a majority of the emotions, scenes and illustrations are dependent on the writing style; it is what conveys them the best.

Your writing style wasn’t really good.
To start with, it made the book very bland and boring. It isn’t really good and descriptive, and it’s very confusing at times.

The description; the book isn’t focusing much on describing the various elements in the book. There are many things in the book which could’ve been elaborated illustrated through words to make it seem more interesting.
For example: the start of the story, where the prince kisses the underaged boy, was not shown elaborately. It could’ve been easily bettered by adding the surrounding while the kiss was happening, by narrating more about the guards and the queen, and the high schooler’s reaction and emotions.

Similarly, there are several things which lack detail.

Also, I suggest working on the dialogue writing and expression.

I suggest using not more than one punctuation mark at times. It seems unprofessional and insincere towards the work.

I also recall you’ve used some informal texts while writing, the weirdest of them being Hoseok getting and startled and muttering a keyboard smash that just isn’t possible. I mean, you say or shout out something; no keyboard smash can be spoken by someone.

I suggest reading more books and developing your writing style. It would be better if you adapt a new and unique writing style which won’t make the book bland.

Grammar & Vocabulary: 09/20

The book lacks a lot in terms of grammar. The grammar is not good at all and needs a lot of improvement.
It requires a lot of editing, and proof-reading for the future.

While editing, some of the areas you will have to focus on are-
Tenses
You keep switching the tenses in the initial chapters, and it’s very confusing since it cannot be determined which tense is used.

Sentence formation
The sentences are very poorly formed, and there are many words that don’t really fit the sentences.

Punctuation
There are several places where you’ve either forgotten to add a punctuation mark, or added an inappropriate one.

Spelling mistakes and typos.

About the vocabulary, it wasn’t good either. You repeat too many words and it makes the book fairly boring. There are many overused words, mostly adjectives. Reading can improve your vocabulary, so I recommend reading some books with a good word choice.

Characters & Development: 05/10

The characters were just fine, but one of the mc’s was really confusing and wasn’t exactly easy to understand, considering his actions.

Hoseok’s character was justified, considering the trauma he went through and the affection Yoongi offered him; it all fit together and his actions were justified based on the mentioned factors.
He tried suiciding, self-harming and starving, all because he thought he was ugly and fat and was suffering. He thought that for once, someone was willing to love him, and he gave that person a chance.
I like the way his character fits together with the things happening around him; he’s portrayed  perfectly.
Also, the development in his behaviour isn’t quite mutual but justified.

The other main lad, Yoongi, was sometimes utterly confusing and didn’t make sense. He pretends to like Hoseok for a moment, and then the next moment he won’t give a heck about him. Though he is just pretending first and then acting true later, he is still very confusing and unrelatable. Also, he does not actually give off the vibes of a king, but just a commoner.

All the other characters were good enough, they fit in their roles which makes the book understandable.

Total: 00/100

Final Note:

You just need some editing and some more plot twists in the book to make it better. I hope you keep the points I’ve jotted her in your mind and improve according to them.

Keep your writing professional and sincere, and try making less spelling mistakes too- I’m sure you’d do better.