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✧ JUDGE : Sugaga777 ✧

Hate by Cool_Summer29

BOOK COVER : 4/5
The cover is indeed eye catching and attractive yet messy. The font is visible but it needs a better font, like a font that actually shows hate. The aesthetic use is good!

BOOK TITLE : 4/5
The title of the story is common yet it suits the story well, it actually caught my attention. The subtitle's position is actually hard to see but it suits the story well.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 9.5/10
The blurb is in perfect length, with a good choice of words and a fascinating description. It makes me want to read what actually made them travel the path of hate... it didn't give any spoilers and that is what I like the most.

FIRST IMPRESSION : 9.5/10
As I read the first chapter, it really gained my attention on its character introduction and it really made me wanna read more. As for the first impression, I thought it would be some love-hate romance story, but it was so different from what I thought.

PLOT : 19.5/20
This plot is definitely original and is very interesting to read... the plot certainly mentioned things related to the theme. Everything blends well with each other which is understandable.

CHARACTERS : 10/10
The characters have their realistic personalities and relatable weaknesses. As the story moves further we can see a good character development.

STYLE OF WRITING : 9.5/10
The writing style of the story is in format. The writing style is neat and understandable with interesting dialogues.

PACE : 10/10
The pace is perfect, and the story is explained perfectly.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 9.5/10
There is no grammatical error, all the punctuation marks, and other things necessary for it are on point. The sentences that are constructed are creative and have no spelling mistakes.

YOUR IMPRESSION : 8/10
I actually found this whole story uncommonly creative and unique. I was really fascinated by my level of imagination. The book was presented with creative stuff, and the story content was unique as I said... just you need a neat cover, and nothing else. You are good to go as you are going.

TOTAL: 93.5/100

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Spooky Love by Chaaaaand

BOOK COVER : 4/5
The cover of the story is well edited, and shows the theme of the story. The editor got a nice idea about the cover. It suits the story well and speaks for itself. It's eye-catching and the font is cool yet it feels empty.

BOOK TITLE : 4.5/5
The title of the story is unique and suits the story, it's attention grabbing, add a subtitle or quote which would make it even better.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 8/10
A dialogue and a small paragraph, as it was short and didn't describe much yet it made me wanna read it, the mentioned words gave a spoiler but that actually caught my attention.

FIRST IMPRESSION : 9.5/10
First chapter of the story is very amazing, it really made me wanna read it further, the introduction about Y/N and some incident about her past which made her see ghosts, it was awesome.

I first thought that there would be some dark story but it was all fun to read.

PLOT : 19.5/20
The plot is definitely original and truly interesting. I am really impressed by it, and I have nothing much to say... language is easy to understand. The theme of horror but not so horror is really good and something unique to read.

CHARACTERS: 9.5/10
The characters are well designed and realistic, they have their own reason and perspective which have been mentioned clearly. They show a nice character development further.

STYLE OF WRITING : 9.5/10
The writing style of the story is quite neat and presented well. The writing style makes sense. The dialogue is good. Nothing much to say.

PACE : 9/10
The story seemed a bit fast yet it's at the correct pace. Make it a bit slow for better character development.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 9.5/10
The grammar is on point, no mistakes and the punctuations are on point with other necessary stuff. The structure of the sentence is nice with no spelling mistakes.

YOUR IMPRESSION : 8/10
I thought at first that it would be some dark ghost love story but it was nothing like that. It was actually very interesting to read and you can get a new experience of emotions. This book just needs good subtitles, and a nice blurb.

TOTAL: 91/100

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Soccer Rivals by @LetJungCookIan

BOOK COVER : 2.5/5
Cover is not that great, it actually didn't match the theme of the story, yet the cover is well edited. The font used was good but the placing was too low.

BOOK TITLE : 4/5
The title of the book is way unique and it really caught my attention, it also matches with the story and it would be better to add a subtitle.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 6/10
The description is short and doesn't describe the story, just some dialogues... you should add a summary of a story which gives less spoilers. But it was good and engaging to read.

FIRST IMPRESSION : 9.5/10
The first chapter of the story was good, I liked how the main character met Jungkook and started with their little fight. It was quite interesting and a unique plot to read, throughout the story it was really fun to read.

PLOT : 19.5/20
By reading the chapters, I really think I have never read a book with such concept and plot, it was actually interesting and original. Everything blends well and seems to form a world that I really liked which is easy to read and understand.

CHARACTERS : 8/10
The characters are well designed and have realistic personalities. They do show character development but lack description of action, which is necessary to understand their habits for better imagination.

STYLE OF WRITING : 8/10
The writing style is quite good, I have no complaints or much to say about but I noticed that there is not a space between full stop and the words for example this:

"The class suddenly went silent breaking the intimate moment between me and Jungkook.The teacher had walked in and man did he look strict. He stared at me through his thick glasses that rested on the bridge of his nose."

And there are many more like this afterwards.

PACE : 9.5/10
The pace of the story is good, not too fast, not too slow. The pace you took is actually good for character development.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 9/10
As I said the full stop issue, rather than that everything is on point, the dialogues are good, the sentence structure is good... not much to say.

YOUR IMPRESSION : 8/10
It's a unique book with a great theme and plot. I really liked this book to be honest. These kinds of books are rare to find. You just need a good cover, nice blurb and descriptive in action! Be more expressive with emotions and actions.

TOTAL: 84/100

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Hwa by 123hikibakas

BOOK COVER : 3/5
The cover was indeed well edited but the face claim didn't actually look like jungkook, the font is pretty and visible but the "WRITTEN BY J-MINI" isn't visible properly. Maybe it will look good in black... in my opinion.

BOOK TITLE : 3/5
The title of the story has a pretty good meaning, and suits the story well. Maybe having a subtitle will help to create an impression on the readers.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 7.5/10
The description is short. It doesn't give much information about the story. Just one dialogue,one paragraph and some questions. Nothing much. But it can make someone want to read the story.

FIRST IMPRESSION : 8/10
For the first chapter, it disclosed many things about Y/N, her appearance, her situation, and talking with her father, something about her past too. It wasn't that interesting but I loved the father-daughter bond. It was relatable and had a rush of emotions.

PLOT : 15/20
The main plot of the story is just revealed in the last part but it does seem interesting. Can't tell much as I said before the main plot is just revealed. But the story is not that easy to understand. It does take some time to figure out what is going on.

CHARACTERS : 6/10
The characters are pretty interesting but can't say much. It's been only 3-4 parts since Jungkook came into the story so I can't tell much about his character. The story is just at its beginning phase so there isn't much character development too.

STYLE OF WRITING : 8/10
I personally liked it the most. The style is perfect. It doesn't confuse anyone and is easy to read. There aren't that many dialogues, only the inner thoughts of the characters.
The dialogues are less and inner thoughts are more so it makes the readers want to skip a little bit.

PACE : 7/10
The story's pace is a little slow but because of this the readers are getting each and every detail of what's going on.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 9.5/ 10
Like the writing style, the punctuation and grammar also left a great impression on me. I hardly found any mistakes. In a total of 13 chapters, I didn't find any mistakes or any punctuation errors.

YOUR IMPRESSION: 9/10
The story is unique. I have never read any story like this before. It's pretty interesting too. I would love to read it further and know what will happen.

One thing I would like to suggest is to keep some more dialogues so it can keep the readers engaged within the story and maybe add some photos of the places or things you describe after that specific para. Not at the end because till the readers reach the end, most of them forget about half of the things mentioned in the story.

Other than this, you are going good.

TOTAL: 76/100

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Mafia's Slave by bts_army7saranghe

BOOK COVER : 2/5
The cover is very simple, just the main character is displayed, it didn't give the vibe it should give, it's just Jungkook. The font used is not really good. You need to make a good cover, which describes the story itself.

BOOK TITLE : 2/5
The title of the story is a bit childish, no offence, yet it suits the story. In my opinion, you can actually come up with a great title and please add a subtitle to make it more fun to read.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 6.5/10
The description was a brick, it didn't actually tell much about the story yet can attract people because of its concept. It actually can make anyone read as it has 18+ CONTENT.

FIRST IMPRESSION : 7/10
The first chapter was so sudden but well... It was hard to understand the actions and emotions of the characters. The first chapter was not that fascinating. I thought at first this book would be different from the Mafia books I've read so far but it wasn't.

PLOT 18/20
The plot was indeed interesting but it was common to read such a plot. There were some creative scenes I liked, the plot was related to the theme and the twist in the plot was actually good. I didn't actually think that Taeshi's character or another character would come like a sudden earthquake. But as I said it was hard to read because of your writing style.

CHARACTERS : 7/10
The characters are interesting but there was not a good description of emotions and actions but sure they were original. There was good character development as the story went by.

STYLE OF WRITING : 4/10
Here comes the main part you have to improve, if you change your writing style you would definitely be able to present a good story. Change the pattern in to a novel style like is:

"You are so good, Wow!...I love it, Really!" Y/N danced crazily as her friends joined her and they began to dance together.

Instead of this:

Y/N-You are so good wow..I love it really...(Her friends also joined her and they were dancing together)

Don't use () for action, just write it in a descriptive way, please make big paragraphs small, and everything else is good.

PACE : 8/10
The story is a bit fast, yet fine to read, I have nothing much to say.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 6/10
There are some grammatical mistakes and some missing punctuations, starting of the dialogues should be in capital. The structure of sentences should be more creative, use more synonyms and modify your sentences.

YOUR IMPRESSION : 6/10
So, the story was good but to make it a perfect book with neat writing style, you need to lessen the grammatical mistakes, use Grammarly for that, for cover you can go to any Graphic Shop on wattpad. And try to read more books which have a neat pattern of writing.

Additionally, use some graphics to make it creative. You can read a book called "Abnormal" by moonchilld_ it would be beneficial.

TOTAL : 66.5/100

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Dark Forest by kookus_kookies

BOOK COVER : 2/5
The cover was well edited but didn't actually suit the story, a better cover can be made if you have a central idea of the story. The font you used didn't show anything but it was so simple. The subtitle's font is also fine.

BOOK TITLE : 3/5
The title is common but really good for a story like this. In my opinion, you can actually come up with a fancy title and the subtitle is amazing.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 5/10
It was short and only had dialogues which didn't tell much about the story.

"𝗜𝗳 𝘆𝗼𝘂 𝘄𝗮𝗻𝘁 𝘁𝗼 𝗴𝗮𝗶𝗻 𝘀𝗼𝗺𝗲𝘁𝗵𝗶𝗻𝗴
𝗦𝗼
𝗬𝗼𝘂 𝗵𝗮𝘃𝗲 𝘁𝗼 𝗹𝗼𝗼𝘀𝗲 𝘀𝗼𝗺𝗲𝘁𝗵𝗶𝗻𝗴"

Instead of this you can write- "If you want something, you have to lose something too."

FIRST IMPRESSION : 6/10
The first part was okay. Can't say good because it was a little confusing. Lina and Y/N are best friends but then also when they met in the mall, they exchanged their numbers which confused me. The sudden line - "Her Mom is so precious and she can't afford to lose her'' was confusing too as there was no mention of anything for Y/N to think like this. In the mall, Lina said she came to Korea to enjoy life with her family but then when she came to Y/N's house she said she is staying forever. Please stick to one thing.

PLOT : 17/20
The plot was good. It was mysterious and that made it more amazing. The story isn't that easy to understand because there is no mention of when the scene is changing along with writing mistakes.

CHARACTERS : 7.5/10
Y/N's character was not described properly but Jungkook's character was well described. The character development was good too.

STYLE OF WRITING : 5/10
Honestly, I didn't like the writing style that much. Readers don't like to read everything in one big paragraph, mostly if you are describing something. The description of the forest was good, but it was too long that many people tend to skip it. During dialogues between Y/N and her Mother, it was not easy to know who was saying among them.

PACE : 5/10
From the first chapter itself the pace of the story was fast....it did slow down a bit in between. To get to the main part, some scenes were explained fast, try not to do that

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 2/10
There were a lot of mistakes. Both in punctuation as well as in grammar. The first sentence of the first chapter started with a "hey YN" which is not correct. The first word should always be capital.

"She heaved a heavy sigh." This sentence came in the second chapter and it's fully confusing. It should be "She let out a heavy sigh" Like this, there were many mistakes.

YOUR IMPRESSION : 7/10
The story was good and unique too. It does make me want to read more but the mistakes are a negative point. If you fix them, then the story will be more hit. Except for this, as I mentioned before, try not to write huge paragraphs. Break them into small ones and work on your mistakes too.

TOTAL : 59.5/100

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