Before I begin the interview, I want everyone to know I'm not a bully and that anything I criticize is not to offend or hurt the author. We are only trying to help. I hope you enjoy and learn from this review and please remember you asked us to do this.

Kakashi's son? By Elle_Reed

Reviewed by Crowillow

First Impressions

The cover of your book is stretched and doesn't fit at all and I can see no title. The cover is important for your readers, to gain their attention, and the cover you have does no such thing.

The title of your story is bland, boring, and highly repetitive of countless others like it before. This is not a good thing as it will make the readers think it is the same story they are reading just only under a different writer.

I feel as if your description is good and point on which also made me smile as I read a bit of Kakashi's known dry-humor.

Your Story's Plot and Structure

The plot is bland and type of repeating storylines of other writer's with Hatake Oc's before. I think maybe taking it up and spicing it with something new would be good.

I think some of your plot was rushed and not given enough time to develop. The chapters were long which is good for your story but the grammar could use work as well while the descriptions need to be used a lot more. Descriptions are important so readers can connect with you and your story. Describing feelings, areas, and characters helps bring the story and the characters themselves alive.

Line-breaks are key things for stories to established when you've changed the scene and tone of the setting, I could not recall you using them at all.

Final verdict on your story

I think if you fix it up a bit you would definitely rise to become a popular writer in no time with your story.

Cheers mate!

-Crowe