Review on Vampire Romance by Twixachu9602

(Sorry, my wattpad is having some problems, I haven't been able to upload the cover of your book, that's what cause the delay in publishing, I will edit this, once it's started working.)

Zoe Anderson and her mother moved to a new town a city on the outskirts of her home town, only to discover blood curling secrets that the historic town holds in its past. Her life takes an unusual twist.

COVER 📘

Your cover is really beautiful, whoever did it, did an amazing work. The blood red text which tells the title, fits perfectly. The font to.the author's name is bold but I think you should remove the ":" it's not needed in a book cover.

TITLE 📘

Nice choice on the title, tho I think I have seen way too many stories similar to this, nothng wrong with that, but I hope the contents makes it special.

BLURB 📘

Now, the first passage of your blurb is WOW!!

If I was going through your story, I would ignore the rest of your blurb and continue with that part. Like I always said the tip to writing a good blurb is starting with a hook, and you did justice to that.

And the rest of the blurb was beautifully written dear, good job on this.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMER 📘

Coming to your grammer, you did an amazing job on this, I hardly spotted any grammatical errors or misspellings and for this being your first time in writing, that's really amazing.

Your punctuation was also nicely done.

Although you may need to look at the first chapter again. The first paragraph or second, after the ellipses, there is no need for a comma again.

Also, apart from commas being used when there is a break in a sentence. In a situation like.

"It was awesome," I replied, (a fullstop will be needed there instead of a comma, so it will be...)

"It was awesome," I replied. "Come to think of it, this house isn't that bad after..."

A comma is only being used before a quotation mark if a dialogue tag comes before it.

Apart from that and making sure not to use more than three dots for ellipses, your punctuation was amazing.

DESCRIPTION 📘

This was beautifully done, like seriously, is this really your first time in writing? Because then, you're really good.

Right from chapter one, you held your readers amazed with your description, it was really done nicely, and your choice of words would spike up any reader interest.

I don't really have much to say on this part except don't slack, don't let that gas finish girl!

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT 📘

I think it was till Chapter 4 I saw more of your characters, but this went on with the plot of your story so that's ok. It's nice that you let the story reveal the character rather than jumbling than in one space.

By chapter four I like Zoe already and those first four chapters, which was just mostly about her, it revealed more to the readers.

I feel like punching Layley, Zoe disappointed me in chapter 4, when she kept quiet with the actions of Layley. But anyways, that's just chapter 4.

OVERALL IMPRESSION 📘

Chapter 1 where the man that came to fix the pipe talked about vampires, I think Zoe's thought of even considering it was funny. If a man told me and talked about vampires I would laugh it off as a joke, I wouldn't even get freaked out a bit, because if she doesn't believe in it, she shouldn't get freaked out at all.

In chapter 2, I got confused at a particular place, you said

"What's your problem!" I stormed, banging...

I had to go over this many times before I knew you meant shouted.

You have a really good book, by chapter 4 you had me in already, don't lose your gas.

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THIS REVIEW IS TO HELP YOU AND NOTHING MORE, WISHING YOU ALL THE BEST.