Author: rosenalove_11

INTRIGUED

Cover: 4/10

The cover is very simple, and I don't think it's eye-catching. The cover needs a lot of improvement, and I don't think it matches the theme of the story. The cover is important because it attracts readers to read your story, yet your cover lacks effort.

Title: 3/5

I don't think the title matches with the theme of the story. The title is a little bit mundane and it is commonly used in Wattpad. I suggest that you should think of a title that is unique and a title that matches the theme of the story.

Synopsis: 7/10

I think the synopsis is okay but it's a little bit confusing, I saw some grammatical mistakes too. I know that mistakes are common, but you need to improve.

Plot: 19/30

I didn't understand the first chapters, I feel like it is too rushed. The story is plain, and I didn't feel excited while reading the story. I didn't understand Jimin's background story, why is he being chased by the guards? The story went rough and it's hard to understand. The plot needs a lot of improvement.

Characters: 3/10

I didn't feel the character's emotions, I don't understand their personalities. I don't think they're realistic. I don't understand them, at a second, they were sad then suddenly their emotions changed. I can't understand their personalities well.

Grammar: 13/25

I saw a lot of mistakes. Especially while reading the story, you put too many punctuation marks that made me lose focus on the story. Especially when you write your dialogues, sometimes you put too much period/ellipsis, question marks, and other unnecessary marks. You can simply express their feelings by describing their emotions. Putting too many punctuation marks ruins the vibe of the story. I saw some misspelled words too and some letters that shouldn't be capitalized. Precisely, I saw a lot of grammatical errors in your story.

Writing style: 4/10

The dialogues are way too messy, it's difficult to understand. The choice of words is okay yet at some point, your writing style needs a lot of improvement. Sometimes your chapters are hard to understand because of the dialogues. Another thing is you would always repeat the words. That is not necessary, you don't have to repeat it. Just express it, you don't have to keep on repeating it because that made me lose focus.

Overall:

The story needs a lot of improvement. Especially your plot, writing style, and your grammar. The story is hard to understand. Just remember this review that I gave you so that just in case you want to edit your story, you will have a guide.

Review Scores: 53/100

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