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The Fight for hope by ClairRao
Reviewer: SilentLover0224

Cover/title: 10/10

- I love how the cover art is super simple and the way that it kind of captivated you. The title is very interesting, it really makes you wonder why they have to fight for hope.

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Blurb: 6/10

- The blurb basically gives a lot of background and not enough of what the book might actually hold. Like I said, it doesn't really give a description, however, you do have one which is more than most books. So way to go!

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First chapter: 4/10

- You have the start of a chapter, and it seems like it could be so much more. It's like you're holding a baby bird in your hands. It's definitely intriguing, however, it doesn't really move the story along.

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Grammar/punctuation: 10/10

- You're constant with it. You don't switch between past and present tense there's nothing major I see you're using quotations with when you're using your dialogue you're using periods at the end of sentences commas where they need to be. It's really good.

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Vocabulary: 8/10

- You try not to use the same words. That's good because nobody likes repetition in a book. However some of the more simpler words could probably be a little bit more complex. Like for example if you say "he turned on", you could switch that out with "he lit it.

- Your dialogue tags like he said, she said definitely are used where they need to be but I feel like they're used too much. Some of the sentences you have he said, she said, Claire said they don't really need to be there and I feel like it's just a bit repetitive if you keep them there.

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Plot/pacing: 3/10

- I feel like the story moves too fast one chapter doesn't flow into the next and events and places names are not consistent throughout your chapters. If you try to keep into one event more than a couple chapters maybe that'll balance out your plot how your story is progressing forward instead of just going from like this event to this event to this event.

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Character/character development: 8/10

- Your characters are well rounded, they're consistent, the names don't change. Claire has her heart set on pups and that's amazing because we can kind of see how she really feels. When the villain team is recruiting villains you can kind of see how desperate he is to take down the kingdoms. But otherwise no characters are really consistent.

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Originality: 7/10

- This a fanfiction based off of paw patrol, so it's not like it's entirely your world from your own mind. But definitely the way the events come out the way that everything is happening and how they're attacked and there's earthquakes. It's definitely very original from the movie.

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World building: 10/10

- When you were telling the story you definitely gave us very good description and some pictures to show exactly what we're looking at where they're at how things are described I love how you actually added images to provide like if we're looking at graces room we could see her bed we could see what the room looked like. All in all this was really good.

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Imagery: 10/10

- Again you gave us a clear image of what you were seeing. You were very descriptive, you gave us exactly to the point of what you were trying to see. But I feel like maybe you could do that more through writing rather than images embedded into your story. I love the story I love work go I love the possibilities all in all beautiful story.

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Overall: 7/10

- The book was really interesting I was really intrigued I wanted to know more about the kingdom about the queen the dogs different planets but again the plot move too fast for me I feel like maybe if an event would have lasted a couple chapters there definitely could've been some clarification on the earthquakes fires that are happening a little bit more background on the billing team if you will and a little bit more background on why Claire's adopted.

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