Task Five: Scores and Opinions

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First of all, I just want to apologize for how late the scores were this time. It was finals week in college, and the last week of a job, plus this weekend I was super busy Christmas shopping plus with Star Wars the Force Awakens Opening, I had to go see it. *ahem* anyway, I'm super proud and impressed by all of you. Congratulations for everyone making it this far! Here's the scores and my personal opinions. Keep in mind that because this was the round just before finals, I was extremely nitpicky. 

District 6 Male: Egan Blake - 9.9

Overall, this was another one of your amazing entries. Your cliff hanger ending left me staring at the screen (once again) with my jaw hanging wide open, freaking out. I desperately need to know what happens next! Seriously! I really enjoyed how you jumped from one fear to another, and yet they were all a part of one simple thing: Egan's fears are what he's done to screw up his life. He was so vulnerable in this entire entry, it seriously just left me with feels the entire time. If I was going to be nitpicky, which because this is so close to the finals, I am, it felt a little bit emptier than your other entries. I'm only saying this because I know what you can do, so I know you can do better than this. That being said, I still enjoyed it, and I understand with everything happening lately, why it felt a little bit rushed. You left me on such a cliff hanger, I need another entry, now! In all honesty though, good luck and I hope to see you in the finals! Also, great challenge! You've earned unlimited word count in the finals and can ask me one question which I will have to answer! 

District 8 Female: Phoebe Beckham - 9.9

Overall, this was a great entry. Your writing just keeps getting better and better. I loved the piece between her and Egan at the beginning – when she gave him the gun I literally freaked out because I had no idea what he was going to do. I liked the way it went though; it all seemed to fit well with your plot. I loved your creativity with Phoebe's fear – how it was just fear itself. That was so unique, and honestly, definitely so realistic. It was exactly what I was looking for when I planned this task. Fear itself. You overcome fear by accepting your fear, facing through it. Which is what Phoebe did. It was so realistic I was definitely impressed. (as usual with you). I did get a little nitpicky, and the dialogue when Fear turned into Heather what she said didn't really make much sense and it was a bit vague. I still don't really know what she was talking about and it pulled me out of the story while I tried to re-read it and figure it out. It's the semi-finals so I'm getting really nitpicky with everyone because you're all really amazing writers. Outside of that, great job. Keep up the good work. Now, with the next entry, I won't give any advice on what I'm looking or hoping for (I'm not giving it to anyone). You are a talented writer, And you know the things I've looked for in the past. Bring it all together and write! Also, nice challenge! You've earned unlimited word count in the finals, and you can ask me one question and I will answer honestly! Great job! I hope to see Phoebe in the finals!

District 7 Male: Chance Rollen - 9.8

Overall, this was a fantastic entry! Your best so far. Your descriptions were so concise and vivid, I felt like I was watching everything unfold, like I was walking right behind Chance. There were nice descriptions in the fear, too. Toward the end, it got intense, and again, extremely descriptive. Your writing style really showed through this entry. That being said, because finals are next, I have to get nitpicky. There were several grammar mistakes, especially instances where you switched tenses, which took me from the entry. I also felt like you threw in so much description in the beginning, and then when his fear came, it sort of fell off and got hard to picture what was going on at times. That being said, it was still a fantastic entry. I loved how vulnerable and scared he was in this entry. I also enjoyed how you included him losing his family. Up until now he seemed like a big guy (an underdog but a big guy) who didn't really fear much. This entry really showed us Chance's vulnerable side. Great job! I hope to see him in the finals!

District 1 Female: Anika Brand - 9.5

Overall, this was your best entry so far! I loved it! It had a nice length to it and you included all the necessary parts! The spiders.... Eugh. It seriously left me cringing and itching even after I finished reading. (in case you hadn't noticed, I'm terrified of anything creepy and crawly, so... yeah. You scared me). On top of that, Anika had some amazing character development in this entry. I feel like it was left in a perfect place wherever she ends up. Her emotion was great as well, and I really loved her development throughout the entry. I also enjoyed your creativity and your descriptiveness was so vivid (even though I could have done without seeing all the horrible spiders, haha). I really want to read more from Anika, and I hope you make it to the finals. Good luck :) Also, nice challenge! You've earned unlimited word count and one question that I'll have to answer. Because you have to tributes, you still only get one question just to be fair to everyone else :)

District 11 Female: Dayshia Kelly - 9.4

Overall, this was a great entry. It was a bit short, but it was still great! I really enjoyed Dayshia's vulnerability in this entry because it's a side she doesn't show very often. You also gave me the feels (congratulations), for The Voice in the beginning. It felt like the loss of a real character, so it takes talent to portray something like that. I genuinely missed it. I also liked Dayshia's fear being a slow painful death. It did feel a bit short when it came to that part, and I felt like the beginning, even though it was nice to mourn the voice, it took away from the fear aspect of the entire entry. It didn't feel scary, and having the Reaper and Anika torture Dayshia to kill her slowly wasn't as creative as I was expecting from you, simply because I know what an amazing writer you are. I'm being really nitpicky this round because next is the finals. But your writing has improved so much! I love Dayshia, and I sincerely hope to see her in the finals! Also, great challenge! You've earned unlimited word count in the finals and can ask me one question that I have to answer.

District 12 Male: Kale Emrys - 9.4

Overall, this was by far your best entry. I'm highly impressed by how much your writing has improved from day one. It's only gotten better each task. I really enjoyed Kale's fear, and your creativeness with it. There was a lot of emotion from Kale, which had been the only thing he'd been lacking a little thus far. I also liked your addition of Pandora's Box... it was a creative touch. That being said, this is almost the finals, so I have to be nitpicky. There were several grammar mistakes, all of which took me out of the entry a bit. It was a little vague about how he managed to overcome his fear, and I would have liked for that to be a little clearer. Despite this, I still enjoyed the entry and you did a good job. I hope to see Kale in the finals! Also, nice challenge! You've earned unlimited word count in the finals, and you can ask me one question which I will have to answer.




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