Dabara Tumbler

1. Style :- 17/20
2. Characterization :- 8.5/10
3. Creativity :- 17/20
4. Structure :- 8.5/10
5. Emotions :- 6.5/10
6. Grammar :- 18/20
7. Title :- 9/10

Total :- 84.5/100

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One cuppa chai

1. Style :-17/20
2. Characterization :- 8.5/10
3. Creative :- 17/20
4. Structure :- 8.5/10
5. Emotions :- 8/10
6. Grammar :- 16.5/20
7. Title:- 9/10

Total :- 84.5/100

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Broken jewel

1. Style :- 15.5/20
2. Characterization:- 8.5/10
3. Creativity:- 16/20
4. Structure :- 8/10
5. Emotions:- 7.5/10
6. Grammar:-15/20
7. Title:- 9/10

Total :- 79.5/100

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DABARA TUMBLER

Aah!! I am in love with this title. Specially, it was like learning something new. It's something unique and perfect to your story. Other than title, I can say the same about the cover. Simple , elegant and it goes well with your plot. Still, it can be more better if you try getting help from some graphic designer.
Coming to blurb, it was sweet, simple and perfect.

If we take a look at the plot of your story, I have already read some stories on the tenant and owners relation. Though, the creativity lies here ; how beautifully you Carried out the plot and shaped the story line. It was all new and lovely read.
Talking about the structure and the character development of your story it was all fine. You gave all the characters there own time to grow. From dialogues to the development of characters , it all goes well.

The point where I feel a lack in your story is emotions. For a reader to attach with it , one needs to feel it. Well scripted and very little grammatical errors with nice structure construction ; still, there was a point I couldn't get attached to your book as a reader.
You really got a nice vocabulary but with a high vocab words there always come a point to maintain the flow of the language. That's where your story lack -- emotions. You really have a good grip on writing and language but it can all go in vain if there are lack of emotions.
Yeah, that's totally my opinion ; you are free to say your take on this point.

Key points :- ✓ Try to work on emotions. Don't get too involved with the vocab that emotions get lack behind.

✓ Will recommend to improve the cover. As I say, perfections are rarely rare , there's always a chance to improve.

Hope, this review will be helpful to you.

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ONE CUPPA CHAI

An apt title and a nice blurb , that was my first thought as I picked up the book. Though, as I reached till the end of the blurb, it felt a little incomplete. Even the last sentence is left incomplete. You really need to correct it.
Next, I looked up to the cover -- just fine. Yup , you really need to change it. Though I like the cover pic but I feel a little editing will work. The font used for title and the way you wrote it is really nice but color doesn't goes well. I recommend to take help from any graphic designer .

Talking about plot and storyline, I totally liked it. The way you carried it is really beautiful, loved reading the bonding between the four and the small lovely moments of kabir and shyla. The Teenage thoughts to first crush, Kabir's embarrassment infront of his male friends to their semi-dates , it was a treat to read. On top of all, this book never lacked the grip on the story and emotions. I always felt connected to it as I started reading it.

Keeping aside, those Lovely amazing points ; there were the points where you can improve. Grammar, there were punctuation error in dialogues and extra paragraph. I mean unnecessarily, dragged paragraph. Sometimes, there is single line and next paragraph. You can improve it with better sentence construction.
Will surely recommend to work on these points, otherwise it was really fun reading your work.

Key points : ✓ Work on the cover of story.
✓ You need to polish your work with grammar and pinch of structure.
✓ Do check out last line of the blurb.

Read, Read and re read , that's the key points to good writing. Beside of reading other's work, you also need to do that to your one's.

Hope this review was helpful for you.

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BROKEN JEWEL

Starting from the title, it was quite intriguing and suited well with your story . Though, I can't say the same for the cover.
Yeah, it's nice one and specially the pics that used are going perfect with your story ; still there is a tinge of blandness. The blending of photos isn't perfectly done.

Coming to blurb, it's nice with a one or two punctuation error. Yeah, it's nice, intriguing but I still feel it can be improved. The description given after the dialogues can be improvised ; that's purely my suggestion as I feel it will leave a better impression.

If we talk about creativity and the structure of your story it was fine. From character development to the background description it was all good. You gave time to the characters to develop there was no fast pace or slow pace. The only thing I felt was try not change pov's in the same chapter. If you want to show different pov's then be it a full chapter. Changing them in the middle feels little absurd.

Taking a look on plot, it's really nice. From plot to story line , characterization and emotions are well balanced . The only point it lacks is grammar and that's the reason that make me overlook all the other positive points. Grammar and punctuation, comes with a lack of grip on writing and flow of language . Though, these are not interlinked but while reading a good book, it always act as barrier if there are any grammatical error.

Mainly the dialogue punctuation and the over use of ellipses. Yeah, it's totally up to you but there are the places where it would be like, just use a simple comma , that's it. So , much ellipses sometimes act like exaggerating the emotions. As every punctuation and ruled come with it's own meaning and emotions. So, beware overuse of punctuation marks can be dangerous to the health of your story :,-)
I would strongly recommend you to take your time, re read and edit this book.

Key points :- ✓ Try to improve blending in cover.
✓ Don't change pov's in the middle of the chapter.
✓ Take your time and proof read the book.

Improving is a natural process that can't be stopped ever. So, just keep improving. I would say read, read and re read, if not me ; you will start finding the weak points. Just keep going on, it was really a good one.

Hope, this review was helpful to you.

Thank you, for giving me a chance to judge such amazing books!

You all three are fab!

~Love, Aurora❤
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