14 DAYS

1. Style : 17/20

2. Characterization: 09/10

3. Creativity : 17/20

4. Structure : 08/10

5. Emotions : 9.5/10

6. Grammar : 18.5/20

7. Title : 08/10

√ Total Marks : 87/100

Review : The title is short, simple, straight forward and fits into the story perfectly. Even though your story plot wasn't something new or unique yet I love the way you had structured the whole story.

The ideas Chance used to give Blue ten reasons to live were common but it's shows simplicity of the story. And I loved it.

You have a good grip on description, which is why the story was so fabulous and read worthy. Specifically in the first chapter, the way described the emotions of Blue,anybody could feel the pain of Blue.

I loved the way you portrayed Chance and Blue's character. Chance is funny and sweet guy while Blue is somewhat closed off. The growth of Blue character was slow and steady. If you had rushed anywhere, then it could break the whole consistency of story.

I don't think there's no need of talking about grammar. The marks says it all. Overall, I enjoyed reading the book.

- the things you need to work on ;

- description/ blurb

I was totally disappointed when I saw your book blurb. Blurb is an important part of book. A blurb gives reader's an insight of the story and also instigate them to read further. So, my suggestion would be to work on your blurb.

-cover

A simple cover, I loved the first cover you have used. You can say it attracted me a lot towards the book. But I didn't felt same about the recent covers. It's totally up to if you want to change cover or not. But I would suggest you to change.

Well, a must read story. So, yeah thank you for choosing me as your judge and giving me chance to read the story. I hope the review helps.

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AFTER I FALL

1. Style : 18/20

2. Characterization: 08/10

3. Creativity : 17/20

4. Structure : 08/10

5. Emotions : 09/10

6. Grammar : 18/20

7. Title : 9/10

√ Total Marks : 87/100

Review : 'After I fall' when I had read the title for the first time, I felt it's too common and simple. But as I started to read the story, I realized there couldn't be better title for this story.

Frankly speaking, this is my first time reading such story and it was totally refreshing for me. I loved the way you structured the whole story. The first part of story revolves around Abby and her boyfriend/husband Bradean. The main story starts after Breadean leave for his military service in Afghanistan.

In the first half, the story whole focus was on Abby and her relationship with Bray. Even how the whole pregnancy took toll on her because her boyfriend was leaving. There's no doubt that you tried to portray both Bray and Abby's about the whole situation.

And it's really hard thing, since both were young and in love so they were ready to do anything to be with each other. But I really appreciate your effort writing and portraying those things so beautifully.

But second half was the hardest one, since it's focused on Abby's character fall. But I felt you should have a little bit more before introducing Cole character.
I felt in second part Cole's character introduced to soon. In second part, you should have concetrated a little bit more on Abby's life after Breadean missing news.

You could have focused on Ethan and Abby's relationship or her relationship with her daughter. Because there was lot of things that we needed to what actually happened to Abby after she learnt about Breadean.

But overall, I loved the story and emotions were well protrayed. Abby's character was relatable.

There's hardly any grammatical mistakes, well I must have overlooked because I was too involved in reading.

- the things you need to work on ;

-cover

The cover is not that good, the blending of picture and colour was mismatched. It would be great if you could made it from good graphic designer with proper details. Because a good cover can actually attracts readers towards your book.

Well, a must read story. So, yeah thank you for choosing me as your judge and giving me chance to read the story. I hope the review helps.

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FOREVER MINE

1. Style : 17/20

2. Characterization: 8/10

3. Creativity : 17.5/20

4. Structure : 8.5/10

5. Emotions : 09/10

6. Grammar : 15/20

7. Title : 08/10

√ Total Marks : 83/100

Review : The first chapter, 'Recap : Mine' need editing, a serious editing. The whole chapter was written without any space or gap due to which I scrolled down feeling to bore to continue. Even though the chapter has lots of things that can easily grab reader's attention.

There was few grammatical mistakes in the book, a little editing would fine to correct them. The paragraphs are too lengthy and dialogues between paragraph makes it look more messy. It would be good if you edit the book.

- the things you need to work on ;

-cover

Quite disappointed by the cover. I don't know who made your book cover but I'm sure that the designer must be completely unaware of the plot line. Frankly, when I saw the cover and the title, I wasn't tempted to read your book. I was sure it was going to be some cliché love story, but I'm hapy that I was proved wrong here.

So, I would suggest you to change the cover. Also, I suggest you to check, 'Ek Aadhuri Daastan' by sparkle_penned. Her book cover designed by GS_Stella, a very good friend of mine. I'm sure after seeing her cover you would realize what kind of cover you need for your story.

-description

The description is damn intriguing, there's no doubt. It's one of the thing that attracted me towards the book. But a little suggestion not use questions in description so much.

The description should create questions in reader's mind by reading it. If you're asking them question, then remember, you have answer them only. But some questions are needed to find by reader's only that too on the right time. ;)

Another strong point in your story was emotions. I loved how each and every emotions were taken a good care of since beginning, making the readers feel the chills while reading the story.

Not every writers are good in protraying the emotions, accurately, but you did it. Kudos to you!

Even the dialogues were strong and attractive, enchancing the glory of the story in all.

Well, a must read story. So, yeah thank you for choosing me as your judge and giving me chance to read the story. I hope the review helps.

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All the three books were amazing and worth a read.

All the best for your future.

Love, Cinderella
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