Title: From the bottom to the top!

Genre: Fanfiction

Author: TheLittleDeathWish

Chapters: 11

You have waited long for me to finally be done with your review and now I am. Let's begin.

Title:

I believe that the depressed main character changes after meeting BTS, therefore it's a good choice to write "From the bottom to the top!". Just be careful, not to make the Title too long. In this case, I guess it's alright, but I'm just giving you the advice for the future.
8/10

Description:

Well, the description is quite negative and short. You said, that you'll write like that, but it honestly doesn't look quite appealing for readers. I would also advise you to write with different words. Write a bit mysterious, about how, meeting BTS, could be the best decision, in a situation like this.
9/20

Cover:

The Cover on the other hand is the opposite. I love how you decided to put wings on the Cover, showing the wish to be free, to fly high and to let go. The dark background resembles the feelings of the main character and the environment, in which she grew up.
18/25

Plot:

The Fact, that she accepts help from "strangers", is amazing, but sadly you do have some major potholes. One example for this is, when she met BTS. She was bleeding though her wounds, which was visible and BTS member RM was the first to notice, however, instead of making sure, that her wounds are treated, she gets a bandage and someone is checking if she is ok, he just asked her to meet BTS alone after the event. No Idol would do that, in fact, no person would do that. Later on, everyone is concerned for her, but nobody seemed to care, to let her wounds get checked, right away. When she meets BTS afterwards, they act as if they have known her for ages and straight up command her to get her stuff from home, so she could live with BTS from now on. I mean, it's your story, if you want a purple unicorn to fall from the sky, then it will, but since you stick to the reality, that would never happen in real. If you want her to move in with Stars, whom she doesn't know personally, then you do need a pretty good reason for it.
15/30

Implementation:

I don't want to seem rude at all, but you constantly try to make your readers feel sorry for your main character and you overdo it with her situation. Like, when I started, I right away guessed, that her parents would treat her bad, at least one of the parents would be alcoholic and she'd get bullied at school. That's just too predictable. I mean, you overdo it with her being treated bad everywhere and from literally everyone. Don't get me wrong, people, who have depression, also do have negative thoughts, but the way you typed it, it's just her constantly crying about how bad her life is, but not in a depressive way, but more like in a dramatic way. People, who have depression, don't sink in self-pity. For example, one of her thought is, "I'm so ugly and fat, who would like me?", or "Fake love represents my life... How my parents hate me. *cries*" I helped people, who had depression and I helped enough, to know myself, how people, who have depression, think.

Moreover, I honestly thought, that it was weird, that she randomly got the idea of going to a BTS Concert, after her Dad was pulling on her wrist harshly and she ran away.
18/40

Writing-Skills:

You have a pretty decent style of how you write. I can literally imagine her dull face, form your writing. Your style isn't too much, nor is it too less, it's in the middle. You make sure not to spend too much time in writing one scene, through which your story can get further and further. One thing I noticed is, that you start most of the sentences with "I". Start with different words, this way it would be varied and more pleasing for the eyes of the readers.
24/40

Grammatical-Aspects:

You don't have many mistakes. The ones you have, are mostly mistakes about the Comma. Take a look at them, when you have time.
22/35

Concluding:

Concluding I would like to say that your story is not bad. There are just a few things, that I would change, to make the story better, in my opinion. However, everyone has a different opinion, if you like the way your story is, then just stick with it.

PuppyBonus: +10

Total: 124/200

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