Title: Short straws

Genre: Fanfiction / BTS Suga

Author: xyoongisswagx

Chapters: 3

Hey, you asked me to check out your story and I did. Therefore, here is your feedback. :)

Title:

Let's start with your Title. Right now, I don't know what you have planned for the story and like I said there are just 3 Chapters, so I don't know how much the name fits. However, I hope for the best! ^-^
-/10

Description:

The description doesn't tell too much, nor too less. I think it's just fine. It's perfect. The way you typed it down, awakens my interest and my expectations. ^-^
17/20

Cover:

About the Cover you used, I think it's very simple held, which is great, but I personally don't find it to appealing, or eye-catching. That doesn't mean that it's bad, or that you don't have a good Cover. I'm just trying to say that Everyone has their own taste and for my taste, your Cover is too simple, yet pretty.
19/25

Plot:

About the plot, I think it's a really interesting story from what I have seen up till now. There are not many Chapters uploaded, therefore I can only tell you what I think about what I have seen so far.
-/30

Implementation:

The start is very good. The only part, which confused me was, why Yoongi would dislike a stranger, who is nice and hasn't even started to hang out with the same friends he has. The question I have is, why does he dislike her, he doesn't even know her. In addition, why would he mind if she hangs out with the same people?

The moment she stood up for herself, she knows that nobody ever talked back to Yoongi, but how does she know that? She didn't talk with her friend about it, nor did the readers know what kind of Image Yoongi has in that school.

You still haven't finished the book so I might just point out something, which you were going to write about in the future, so please don't misunderstand. XD
31/40

Writing-Skills:

Now about your writing skills, they are amazing. I noticed, that at some points you could've used a simple sentence construction, but you used a better/different construction, which made it very pleasant for me to read your story. Plus, I didn't just see the sentences I was used to read, it was something new and that is something really good.
37/40

Grammatical-Aspect:

About the grammatical aspect, I can't say that it's negative, that you have those mistakes at some parts of your writing, because these mistakes are done by everyone and that's normal. Moreover, this is your first book, therefore I believe you get the "PuppyBonus". However, I would like to advise you to reread your story when it's uploaded, so you can find and correct your own mistakes. ;P
24/35

Concluding:

All in all I know the story has potential and you can really make the best out of this story. I liked this story for how much I have read just now and I am honestly really curios about Suga's reaction in the next chapter. ^-^

PuppyBonus: +10

Total: -/200
    (138/160)

Here is your sticker. Message me privately if you want me to send it to you, or if you want me to put it on your Cover.

Keep it up!

Guys, check out the story, if you are interested. 

That it for now.

Bye! ♡