Hey Candies,
How do you do?
Well my next review is on "The real number-a Harry Potter fanfiction" by wordywonders
Glad I got to drop the review as promised.
Sooo yeah I'm going to be reviewing this book under the following headings.

Plot development:
I have to say that this is the first Harry Potter fanfiction I've ever read, and it's sooo good.
You really did well with your descriptions and plot. It's just like a movie, which is actually really cool. Your imagination is commendable and all your ideas flow sequentially.

I love your choice of words and diction. It's simple and really easy to understand...I love the development of the plot so far, you're actually taking your time, which is really good. Your punctuations are really on point, and though it's just 2 chapters so far and there's not much to talk about, I can't wait to see what you have in store for your readers.

Please try and update as soon as possible, because the plot is actually really good and is going in the right direction. I actually do hope to see lots of drama in Hogwarts. It's a 9/10

Character development:
The characters are really good, although I noticed you didn't really describe Ron. You mostly focused on Harry, when you talked about his black hair and other stuff.

But apart from that, the characters are really good, and they are developing at their own pace. I can't wait to see your ideas in subsequent chapters. It's a 8/10

Book cover:
Your book cover is pretty good, although I noticed that you didn't add your pen name to the cover.

And another thing is the font. The title didn't completely fit the cover, and it's making the cover look like it was hastily made.
But nonetheless, the cover is cute. I must suggest that you try anyone of these cover/graphic shops...you can give them the current background as a resource image. It'll still be great though.
It's a 7/10

Grammatical erorrs:
Well, you're really good with your punctuations and grammar...there were times I had to scan and search thoroughly, so I wouldn't fail to point out errors. You're actually that good, and I encourage you to keep it up.

You positioned your commas and full stops mostly in the right places, and I must say I'm really impressed. Though there were minor errors I spotted, but not to worry, corrections make us better writers.

So corrections to errors are in blood and additional explanation given in brackets. Please if you have doubts at any point, do not hesitate to inform me. I'd be more than happy to clarify any doubts you may have. 
Here it goes.

The letter from Hogwarts:

We are pleased to inform you that Hogwarts school of witchcraft and wizardry has reopened, and you have the privilege of returning to complete your seventh year of education (there's meant to be a comma after "reopened", and note the expression in bold...it fits better)

You need your NEWTs for that, you know? (There's meant to be a question mark...since it's a question)

It's not just about career, you know?

The row at Malfoy Manor:

A black faded mark was just visible on his left hand, and it had the most curious design, like a snake coming out from the mouth of a skull (note the words in bold)

He had been right in his guess as to whom the 'guests' were

The same way that you imposed every decision of yours on me, as if I were a dumb horse that had to be controlled through reins. (Take note of the comma after "me" and past tense of the verb always comes after "as if" and "as though"...

Example, it's grammatically correct to say "as if I were his brother" and "as though he knew the truth"...note that the past tense of the verb is always used.)

The same way you always forced me to do your bidding, as if I were a slave and not your son. (Take note of the "were a"...take note of the words in bold and also the punctuation)

Otherwise you'd have been long dead. (Take note of the expression in bold)

General Review:
Hey guys, this book is really good and I strongly recommend it to Harry Potter, fanfiction, fantasy, supernatural category/genre lovers.
Though it's still ongoing, it'll still be very great if you check it out.
Overall rating: 8/10

A/N: Hey guyss, my next review is going to be on "The new Helel" by Aleksandr_Vincente...
Expect your review soon.
In the meantime, stay safe, drink lots of water and eat candy❗❗❗

XOXO,
Candy lover
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