Cloud Nine Reviews
Title of Story: A Yellow Flower With A Red Tip

Title: The title is really one of a kind. It fuels my curiosity as to what the flower truly symbolises in the story. The hues for instance are contrasting and therefore could mean opposites or good personalities with bleeding bad ones, which in my opinion helps keeps readers curious and interested.

Cover: It is a nice and eye-catching cover, and the awards placed on it do glorify its meritorious achievements thus far. I like how the main twin characters are emphasized in the cover, making it especially relevant to the story.

The only thing about the cover that I would like to point out is the subtext at the bottom in Filipino. Perhaps this could be enlarged a tad bit more for better readability. Overall it is a wonderful cover.

Blurb: The blurb is packed with information but is kind of long in my opinion. It does give an in-depth description of the story's synopsis which is really important and gives life to the blurb itself, however, I believe it can be improved holistically meaning altogether and shortened with some polishing.

Another is that it does not shed light on the one who is speaking. I was honestly confused and thought a female character was talking instead of a male. So in order to clear this, I suggest you drop a few hints pointing that it is a male character's pov.

Also, as you will still be editing let me point out that there are some but only minimal grammatical errors within the blurb as well.

Grammar: As I mentioned above, the story does have some minor grammar issues, but I know you will be back to edit these out. As it is so, I will only be reminding you to keep checking for unnecessary and/or misspelled words, incorrect capitalisation and improper punctuation.

These are only examples of what you may find, but be sure to locate and correct them to help better your story for your readers!

Plot: There will always be room for angsty and somewhat dramtic teen romance in my heart and there is a really great audience that supports it as well. Your story exhibits the style of the original loved Wattpad authors and I have nothing against it.

The flow is good and so is the dialogue but maybe the narrative is too long and plentiful. Here are some things to take into consideration to improve the plot and structure: First of all, try to avoid introducing with name age and physical features as this is a cliché that drags readers, second do invest time in building the character's world (this refers to describing the scene in more detail) and third, try to add more build-up and cliffhangers at the end if you can.

Surpise your readers with the twists your story can go through, keep your ideas limitless. They are good ideas but I know they can be refined and taken to greater heights!

Well, that's it for my short, blissful, and honest review on The Yellow Flower With A Red Tip. Don't forget to follow rule #3. And once again, thank you so much for allowing me to review your work!

"We accept the love we think we deserve."
-Stephen Chbosky

love always,
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