The Library Under the Stairs by @WillowSeitz

I only read two parts because the second one was really long.

Impeccable grammar. The writing was beautiful - it played out like a scene from a film in my head.

Some comma splices. Fix these with either a full stop or a semi colon.

Numbers spelled out in full look more formal.

Really good showing and not telling - intrigued by the descriptions.

I could tell this book was going to be a slow burner and really something you can sink into. Not often that you find a gem like this.

I'll tag you in a post where I explain how to format dialogue properly to others.

Sorry I didn't have much more to say, but this was really amazing and you should be proud. :)

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