The Nightmare by @briizy98

I like your style. It's dark and mysterious; perfect for the genre.

Brilliant description - I can see that's where you shine.

Dialogue was sometimes not formatted properly. I can tag you in a critique where I explain how to format dialogue properly to others if you want (maybe comment yes if you do.)

Tense jumps were occasionally made. Try and stick to the past tense.

The flashback was well executed. It seemed realistic, which is hard to achieve.

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