The Colloquy by @Abhay-Aditya-Jain

This book only had one part so it was very hard to get an overall judgement on it. For that reason, this critique will be relatively short, but I will try my best.

Some basic grammatical errors were made. Like not putting full stops at the ends of sentences, and also using full stops instead of commas to separate out clauses.

The chapter was also quite short. I have nothing against short chapters, but I feel like this one could have been expanded on a lot more. Maybe add some asterisks after to indicate a change of time, and then continue the story. You've certainly got the space for it.

Overall, a good attempt, but just not enough to give you an in depth review.

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