It Had To Be You by @chhavi4778
CHAPTERS 6-9

New speaker = new line. Literally all I can say. :)

Oh, and I'll be putting the rest of the comments here as well as you requested the whole book. I'll tag you with the different chapters each time.

CHAPTERS 10-12

Again, new speaker=new line

Colloquial language ruins the mood.

Maybe more focus on how Asher gets to the window. I found that confusing.

This is all extremely cheesy/cliche. But if it's the style you're going for, so be it.

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