A Book of Heartbreaks by @MmTt11

The first poem read more like prose, but I liked it - something different and original.

The second, I liked how you manipulated the use of punctuation and also capitals. It really showed the anger and how the narrator was deliberately not conforming.

The third one - that one line reminded me of the tooth fairy. Heh. Really good emotion conveyed.

Some grammar issues but tiny, tiny things.

Keep it up!

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