Hi! So we're back to reviewing Gabriella by storyheadquarters101

At the last chapter, we're left with the question "You?" as in, Gabby saw someone in her cave.
Now let's find out who it is :)

I think you can eliminate the "suddenly".

Your lines of "My temperature grew cold. I felt cold for a moment." is  repetitive. Instead, you can turn it simpler with "The sudden chill in the air striked me."

This way, we can describe both the temperature and the reaction.
Woah, Gabby! You change out of... Fear? So the transformation reacts to emotional condition?

I changed into my wolf form. Then, you can somewhat describe how her arms went hairy and her teeth grew sharper, and her sense of smell grew stronger.
My stomach churned, a gulp swallowed down my throat.
Can wolves feel fear?
Because that's exactly what I'm feeling right now.

OH MY GOD, WHAT?!
SHE'S JUST... THERE?
SO THE ALPHA DID KNOW AND JUST DOESN'T WANNA TELL! (SEE #2)
SO MY GUESS C IS RIGHT!

YAYYY ♪＼(*＾▽＾*)／＼(*＾▽＾*)／
Anyway...

So here, I'm gonna share a cheat sheet to describe fear!

So you can replace straight out "fear" with any of these! Yay!

You held her hands?
Oh, both hands?
Oh, like a police...
So.. Behind her back, or what?

Let's say it's behind her back here,
I grabbed her wrists and pulled them behind her back. She pulled back.
I tightened my grip.
I dragged her out to meet the Alpha.

Is this it? Really?
Am I really free now?

Gabby, it's only 3rd chapter, of course you won't be free yet! :3 she'll escape or the Alpha may be evil or something...

The second last line there, indicates she knows it isn't the end.
But this isn't a 3rd-POV Omniscient, so that isn't possible. It's Limited 1st POV, which means we're not supposed to know whatever Gabby doesn't, since we're pretty much in her head now.

1st POV
I, me, mine. The readers see things through the eyes of the narrator. The narrator is basically talking to herself, which we can hear. Example: Percy Jackson, Hunger Games.

2nd POV
You, your, yours. The usual POV in CharacterxReader fanfics, that used (Y/N) as your name. (fun fact, I've never put my name. I've always imagined the girl's name in these fics as Y.N.)

3rd POV Limited
My personal favorite POV. She, he, her, him, hers, his, their, they, theirs. But limited. As in, like 1st POV, we get into them but not through their eyes. Example: Harry Potter, Heroes of Olympus.

3rd POV Omniscient
God-like POV. She, he, her, him, hers, his, their, they, theirs. The narrator knows WAY MORE than the characters. For example, outrightly telling us, "she didn't know he did it." "He likes it, but she doesn't." and jumps from head to head. Example: The Girl who Could Fly.

unless, of course, you're trying to make it comedic PJO style. "I thought it was going to end. But of course, my luck wasn't as good."

WHAT?
What is this twist....?
(╯°□°）╯︵ ┻━┻

YOU LIAR.

Also, add a " after then twin.

impostor , but it ain't wrong either. 😋

So it wasn't my twin sister?

Oohhh...  Is Rain your friend~?
Or something more~¿
😉
Oh, wait. Rain is girl...?right..? I mean, I'm not homophobic but Rain reminds of the celebrity with the same name..

I think you should describe Rain a bit. How he/she (well :p) look like, maybe the eyes or something.

SAMUEL,YOU-
WHAT DO YOU MEAN A TEST?
SHE HADN'T MET HER SIS FOR 13 YEARS, OF COURSE SHE WON'T REMEMBER MUCH. OF COURSE IT'S PURE LUCK...
AAHHH ┻━┻ ︵ヽ('Д´)ﾉ︵ ┻━┻

:P
LOL HAHA.
Anyway....

I knew he was right.
I did that.
I thought it was Rose, but it wasn't.

What do you mean how? It's purely Samuel's fault to not give you anymore hints. The world is BIG, he can't expect you to search all over THE WORLD for her.

My breath was stuck in my throat.
My head hung low.
Dissapointment washed over me.
I relied on luck, and not instincts.
That wasn't the right way.

The wolf way.

I had to get better at it.
I had to try again.

(I mean, I'm pretty sure wolves use instincts and not luck...)
God damn, Samuel, you praise her as the most powerful being in the whole universe, then tested her like that. DON'T YOU KNOW SHE CAN CHANGE THE PHASE OF THE MOON AND CAN ATTACK YOU LIKE THAT?

(╯°□°）╯︵ ┻━┻

I. do. Not. Like. That. Alpha.
Anyway...

Anger and guilt flowed through my veins. I put my hand over my chest, the thump of my heart buzzed against my palms.

I had to do it.
To be free.
I need to be free.

But how?
Where could she be?
Memories of my twin, her (insert laugh or smile or eyes or whatever) flooded into my brain.

My head pounded and spun as I thought of a plan.

Again with Gabby sleeping...

My dream wasn't a normal one.
It was strange.
A nightmare.

Let's build some suspense here, because writers are cruel like that.

"What happened?" I asked. Their eyes were covered in scars, wounds and purple bruises all over their body.

"Who did this to you?" I asked, kneeling down to them. (Assuming they're lying down, that is) "Who would've done such a thing?"

"Gabriella," my father croaked. "It was your-"
He went limp and fell. Pale. Dead.
I felt my breath stuck in my throat as I turned to my mother.

"It was a re-re-la... "

(IF THE MOM DIED) 👇👇👇
She fell, and I cradled her head in my arms, my breathing unsteady.

"Focus..." I muttered to myself. "What's a rela-"
Then it came to me.

Reaction time
I know it's a dream, Gabby, but you treat your parents' death like it's nothing. Oh well, dad died. So, mom, who is it?

Lemme guess...

RELATIONSHIP
RELATABLE
RELAXING
RELY
RELAY
RELATED
\(-ㅂ-)/ ♥ ♥ ♥

Well, so far still kinda good. I noticed you use more "show" than "tell" here than the previous two.
So far: 7/10.
Chapter 4 coming soon!
♪ ♬ ヾ(´︶'♡)ﾉ ♬ ♪