By iluleeoppa

Title: Interesting choice. I like that you didn't make it too obvious. It definitely pulls readers in.

Blurb: The blurb is definitely interesting and catch but I think you wrote it a little sloppily; plus, I spotted a few grammar mistakes you'd want to check.

Cover: The cover fits the theme of the story. It's simple but still attractive enough to make readers want to give it a try.

Plot: I read the prologue and Chapter 1, with the intention to proceed further with reading later on. The prologue is short but effective. I didn't like the first paragraphs of the first chapter as they were just mere info dumping. You can either get rid of those or reformulate the beginning so that it flows better. Speaking of characters, the most prominent and relatable is definitely the protagonist, Rain. Perhaps you could try and improve the relationship between characters as well as transitions between one scene and another.

Grammar: Okay. Let me be honest, I read other users' comments about misspelled words and misused punctuation marks. I have nothing else to point out myself, but I can only say that grammar is the weak link of your writing.

Overall rate: 6.5/10

Would I recommend reading this story? If you like action and can get away with the "bad boy" trope, you might appreciate this story.