By jayjay_ash

Title: Simple, but not predictable. It catches readers' attention.

Blurb: Is it an actual blurb or just an extract from the story? If the former applies, then you had an interesting stylistic choice, but pay attention as it may not sit well with many readers. If you are just using an extract from the story, then I'm sorry but the lack of a proper blurb may not beneficial for you.

Cover: While I love the picture you chose and the dark theme, the font choice is absolutely inappropriate. Perhaps you should try something different or ask for help.

Plot: I read the prologue (in my opinion, you didn't need to split it into two parts, since it wasn't too long, but it's your choice) and Chapter 1, hoping to read more when I have time. Your style stands out because of your powerful descriptions and the depiction of the two main characters' traits, especially Garrett's. Pay attention not to fall under clichés further on, the story is promising.

Grammar: Apart from one tiny typo (non-capitalized "I"), I found no serious grammar mistakes.

Overall rate: 7.5/10

Would I recommend reading this story? I think you should give this story a chance, especially if you like strong and well-thought characters.