Author - Egwuji

Introduction -

An author becomes a winner when he/she is able to bring a picturesque view in front of the reader's eyes while reading a chapter. The opening scene is well described, the place where the humans are tortured literally chills the spine. The compassion which the devil has towards a human, the anger his father showed when he came to know that his younger son is emotional, which is a rare sight considering the fact that he is the son of a devil is really applause worthy.

Title - Humans often get curious when they hear a name that sounds cool and attractive. When I came across the term Undivulged, it piqued my curiosity. Not many come up with such a title that gives a glimpse of mystery thriller aura. Good work.

Cover - A devil with white wings is a sure interesting picture. Colourful, attractive book covers always have a huge plus point. The author has the ability to come up with a little more creative cover that will definitely attract more readers.

Blurb - Sometimes, being straight forward has its own disadvantages. The blurb gives away the major part of the mystery, that is, Hailbuzar's brother spreading the virus on Earth and how the former tries to save the humans.

A little tweak in the blurb, like, hiding the identity of the person who spreads the virus on Earth, will definitely increase the reader's curiosity. By creating a mystery around it, the book will definitely go a notch higher in it's quality.

Summary -

God has a son who is the devil himself. He has two sons, elder son is called Albazar and the younger one is Hailbuzar.

Hailbuzar is compassionate and has a little soft heart when compared to his brother and father. That becomes a reason for the others to shun him.

When Hailbuzar comes to know about the chaos his elder brother had caused on Earth by spreading a deadly virus, he comes down to Earth with his loyal servant Zara.

Being incognito, he sets up a pharmaceutical company and make a man called Ted Hamilton to take his place as the CEO.

Then starts the cat and mouse game between the brothers, that involves demons, vampires, witches and supernatural powers. How Hailbuzar saves Earth forms the crux of the story.

Analysis and Evaluation -

Characters and their development -  Hailbuzar is a really complex character that requires quite a lot of patience to build him. Kudos to the author for coming up with a devil character who is soft hearted.

The variations in a single character is shown in a fantabulous manner. The author has clearly differentiated his devil side towards his enemies and his angel side towards his friends and well wishers. He is not perfect and that shows that even angels and devils can make mistakes.

Ted, in the beginning, appeared shallow. His screen presence did nothing but curse a few expletives. His irritation towards his bodyguard is well defined. After a few chapters, his character gains weight and that made the entire story a little more interesting. Spouting cuss words is always an uncomfortable area. May be, the author can try to reduce the usage of such words that deteriorate the book's goodness.

Zara's character came as a surprise. It was a shock when it got revealed that she betrayed. She is a sharp, witty character and her presence started diminishing towards the end. She is an important character and the author can give a little more importance to her.

Albazar is like a flash. Not much about his character is revealed except for the fact that he, for some reason, looks for approval from his father. His characterization, though appears strong, fizzles out. His pov is very less. The author can give a separate chapter as to why Albazar wants his father's approval and his side of the story.

There are other characters like Gabrielle, Michael, Kayana, Dracula and Saint, who have good screen presence. Their point of view is not much explained, but they have played their parts well.

Light can be thrown on Hailbuzar's past with Kayana so that readers can understand why her character is complex.

Overall, the characters have their own flaws, yet, they shine brightly in their respective fields. Good job.

Plot - The main plot is about saving Earth. The author has done a good job in keeping the mystery intact and coming up with sudden appearances of unexpected characters. There are a certain things that the author can focus.

Instead of writing too many cuss words, the author can just mention the mood of that particular character.

Likewise, in chapter Aftermath, instead of "What's so important to you other than money and boobs of women?", you can give, "What's so important to you other than money and curvy women?"

Instead of writing explicitly about a woman's body parts, the author can mention it in a decent manner.

There are many such places where the author has explicitly mentioned a woman's anatomy in colloquial and not so polite manner. That needs a severe editing. Good readers will always feel awkward when they come across such phrases.

Descriptions - The author has done a really good job while narrating the characters, the nature, the emotions. A special mention about the scene where Ted Hamilton kills his rival for the sake of his daughter whom he thought he hated. Ted's emotions were heart warming.

The friendship between Zara and Hailbuzar is really applause worthy. Though she betrayed, it is easily understood that it is for his own good.

The solar eclipse and the war that takes place is commendable. The author has very well described each and every event.

Grammar - To err is human. There are certain negligible mistakes in sentence construction. Also, the book has a good scope of gaining popularity if it undergoes proper editing and proofreading.

Sensory flow - The emotions are a big plus. The readers can easily connect to the characters and the latter's feelings get to the reader's heart. The rage which Hailbuzar feels when his love died in front of his eyes is really note worthy. Fantastic job.

Conclusion -

A good book that has greater scope to become the best book with the right amount of editing.

This review is my personal opinion and I apologise if anyone is hurt unintentionally.

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