Review 4 // Evan Morris

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Ooooooh a really well though out original character here. Since this one's so long, I'll give feed back during multiple points of each section if it's needed.
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Grounding and universe

Ooooooh this actually sounds really cool! I love this twist look on super powers. It's a very interesting concept and a story the I'm sure a lot of people will read.

Character information

It's quite refreshing to have an oc not be this perfect looking dude that's 6ft tall. I like his appearance and that he had a child at a young age, you often see female ocs that have children at a young age, not male ocs.

I'm genuinely struggling to find things to actually critique with this character because it's so well thought out. His personality seems realistic, but it is very common. You could potentially add aspects about his power. Like since he's protective of his children, he could be paranoid of losing control of his abilities and hurting them, or something along those lines. This will give a view of what we can assume someone dealing with superpowers would feel like in this situation and how they would act.

A wide range of hobbies, good, makes him more grounded with reality.

I believe that the father thing is realistic. The stuff with his mother should work due to the character himself being very balanced, but try not to overdo the crazy Christian mother thing, because it is done a lot in media, mainly the horror genre or in tragic backstories. Like I said, you shouldn't have to worry about this that much as long as it's written well.

I love that Evan is a trans character, but what I love more is that you didn't mention it like it was part of his personality. It makes him feel realistic and not like you're making him trans for popularity points.

I also like the sounds of his friends and the idea of balancing eachother out, but make sure that the characters don't click with everything they do. Even friends have conflicts and that can also make them feel more real and create conflicts for our protagonist to over come, which will make the reader more invested in his life.

I like that his crush is someone he doesn't want to date because of his daughter, that is a consideration that actual parents would take into consideration, especially when they care about their child as much as Evan seems to.

As for enemies, most people have some kind of enemy, even if its just someone they don't like at work. This could even be worked as a comedic aspect is you write a friendly rivalry.

Backstory

This seems like a good backstory, but just be careful with the Christian mother thing and also the running away, since it is good a lot, but he has good reason so I don't think it should be too much of an issue.

Other

Sounds like a good power with realistic backlashes that has a good way of functioning with this. I like this power.

Stats

Nothing wrong with the stats, they seem realistic and fitting for the character, so good job.

Final thoughts
This character is incredibly detailed and well developed. He is fleshed out with a good personality and interesting traits. Like I said earlier, there's not much I can say for you to improve but a few tweaks here and there could really make your character come to life.

So very good job.

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you of course do not have to listen to what I've said. This us all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*

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