Review 73 // Midori Adachi

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Another dr oc this time for Geckoey

My comments will be in bold

Basics and grounding/character information







I don't have many issues here and I actually really like her design. The one thing I have an issue is, is the fact she is calculated and spontaneous. Those personality traits condradict one another so I recommend removing one of the traits or figuring out a better way of making it work.

Btw, you can have a heteromantic asexual person. That's where they're romantically attracted to someone of the opposite gender but they're not sexually attracted to them. If that doesn't make sense just let me know and I'll try to explain more.

Relationships

These work though I might be slightly biased due to Fuyuhiko being my favourite character from that game. I can understand the enemies I suppose, more Peko then Mikan, so make sure that's explained.

Backstory

This works for now but I definitely recommend coming up with an actual backstory that makes up the character. It isn't as important in dr though so I don't think it's all too important.

Other

Cool I guess. Idk what to say here.

Stats

These stats are pretty high, I recommend balancing out the 5s with 1s because that way the character can have high stats but still be balanced.

Final thoughts
This character is pretty decent and all you have to do is develop her further and add some more stuff and I'm sure that this'll be a great character.

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*

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