Author: heyennbee
Book title: Living in the shadows
Reviewer: Rita_writes

The background of your cover is really nice and not just that, it's connected to the title. What I have a problem with is the fonts, I just don't agree with it, I could barely see your name as the author because it blended into the background and the size of the text was too small. You should get a new cover, for the beautiful story you have written.

The blurb went on way too long, it was more like a summary of the story and you gave off too much, but it was an interesting read.

The flow of the story was great, it went on at a great pace. I liked how you introduced your characters slowly, allowing your readers you settle and understand one before bringing others in. Personally, I get confused when I see characters scattered all over the place, I'm glad I didn't see that in your book.

Description and grammar was amazing. This was ok as I got a good enough imagery and I hardly saw any grammatical error.

Your punctuations is the only problem I have in your story. I will list the mistakes below.

📌 Ellipses - You used more than three dots, I learnt that four could be used sometimes, but the ones I saw in your book was way pass that. You should go back and correct those errors.

📌 Closing punctuation in a dialogue - I noticed you kept putting the closing punctuation outside the closing quotation mark.
Example:

"I don't care anymore, I just need to get some rest", Sarah said. ❎

"I don't care anymore, I just need to get some rest," Sarah said. ☑️

It should always be inside not out, so you should go back and correct that. Sometimes you forgot to add a closing punctuation mark, you should go back and correct these errors.

📌 Multiple exclamation point - I understand that you were trying to express your characters feelings. When writing an informal letter, more can be used to express your point, but in a story like yours, only one should be used.

📌 Character Space - You made the mistake of including two characters dialogue in the same paragraph, which should never be. I noticed this in some areas and advice you go back and correct this to avoid confusion.

📌 The Em- dash, there were cases were you kept on using the hypen (-) instead of the em (—) dash.

Characters were really interesting with great personalities. My favourite will have to be V, he really made me laugh and his feelings for Red is just so beautiful. I also like Red, he could sometimes be dense, but I do understand that he was confused by his new emotions though.

I enjoyed the first few chapters I read and I plan to read more. This is a really beautiful story, work on your cover and keep up the good writing.