Title: TAKE ME HOME
By WimpieKid

Reviewer: Evergreen_Ebony

Title: The title is too plain and is not interesting enough to catch a reader's attention. Please try to give your story a more exciting name.

Cover: The cover is simple and pretty, but I don't think it accurately captures the plot of the story. I suggest that you replace it with a cover that showcases the romantic theme better.

Summary/Blurb: The description is nice and, and I like the format of dialogue and descriptions. However, it is too long. Try to summarize the details, it will be much better.

General Concept/Plot: The idea of arranged marriage between people who do not love each other has been written millions of times. However, you have written your story in such a unique and pleasant way. It has a diverse cast, and believable characters. It was good to see the story from different points of view right from the start.

Grammar/Punctuation/Structure: 
There are a few grammatical errors, and absence of correct punctuation here and there. You also need to avoid the excess use of pronouns (she, he etc) and one sentence paragraphs.

Writing Style: Simple but engaging. Good balance between descriptions and dialogue.

Setting: You need to add more details about the environment. Describing the environmental settings is necessary to make a story more enjoyable. I really liked what I read, but I had to make assumptions about where they were and what it looked like.

Characters: Your depiction of Daniel Soprano and Posie Lancaster made the story pleasant to read. You allowed us to realise that Daniel is not pleased with the arrangement, but he is matured and level headed in handling the situation. Posie is a shy, naïve but likeable person. However, you can add more strength to their characters by introducing some conflict between them earlier in the story. Considering that the marriage was arranged they got along too quickly.

Conclusion: Your story just needs a few adjustments and some editing to bring out the best in it. Best wishes and good luck.

Ebony