Client: DreamingBud

How it felt like when I was reading your book:

TITLE

Festered was the most suitable title for the collection of short stories. At first glance, I thought that maybe it could be poetry. Honestly, there cannot be a better title than festered.

BLURB

The blurb was simply charming and I love the substantial choice of words that you chose to include in the summary.

I would recommend removing the first line because it's crystal clear on the cover.

No, it's not a bad sex must be replaced with: No. It wasn't bad sex.

Also, use full stops after the word 'No' in the next two sentences to make the terms look stronger and emphasize your point. 

Further are mentioned... must be replaced with The further mentioned are...

You could also add additional tags to your story if you'd like. This would make sure your book reaches a larger audience.

COVER

Brilliant! I find the cover quite suitable for the story. I like how we cannot completely notice the face. The calligraphy used in the title and the one-liner is beautiful. The author's name is clearly seen as such a good job on that!

PLOT AND GRAMMAR

This is my first review of a one-shot book and I am glad it's yours. I know it doesn't have happy endings but it was worth reading that so many modern fairy tales have such horrible endings.

There are a few corrections that you could make though.

1. He was quick to decline, "I avoid drinking as it makes me embarrass myself." he said with a nervous chuckle

What it could have been: He was quick to decline. "I avoid drinking as it makes me embarrass myself," he added after a nervous chuckle.

Try avoiding using words such as said, say, told, and tell and try using new words in the dialogue. Also remember, if words like the above are being written, a comma is added after the sentence. If there's an action performed, like declining something, it would end with a full stop.

2. Along with some disappointed sighs, expressions like, "Aw, you are such a baby." "Aw, don't be a party pooper." Were heard from her friend and boyfriend.

What it could have been: A chorus of 'Aw, you are such a baby' and 'Don't be a party pooper' erupted around the table.

Keep things simple!

3. "Isn't this what she did too?", my inner voice mocked me.

The comma after the double apostrophes is not necessary because the dialogue posed here is a question.

OVERALL

This book has a lot of raw details in the plot and I am glad that you put a warning and a disclaimer at the beginning. It just needs a little bit of polishing. I love the author's notes that you post at the end of each chapter to just soothe the readers, they are truly valuable.

I wish you good luck with your future projects! ♥ DreamingBud