Client: Sophie11Lightfoot 

How it felt like when I was reading your book:

TITLE

Seems like the start of a new Disney themed book. It's pretty charming and speaks for itself. I love how it revolves around the main character so 10/10.

BLURB

Perfection! It's like seeing a movie trailer and has just the right amount of information to lure the reader in, so great job!

COVER

I love the charm that radiates from the cover. Since it is a book, I think it would be lovely to have the title and the author's name written on it.

PLOT

I love how simple and charming it is. It gives of a younger sibling perspective of life and it's nice to see that for a change. A lot of stories usually have their spotlight on the eldest child, so it's refreshing to see a change.

There were just a few places that I felt needed change.

1. "Um, I was told to get my brother." he isn't making eye contact so I know he's lying.

What it could have been: "Um-, I was told to get my brother." He isn't making eye contact so I know he's lying. 

2. "No. We call them daggers." she crosses her arms.

What it could have been: "No. We call them daggers." She crosses her arms. 

Just remember the next sentence starts with a capital letter when the dialogue ends with a full stop. ♥

These minor mistakes can be eliminated if you read your story aloud or write it on Grammarly or another writing draft that you prefer.

OVERALL

The books is very lovely to read. Maybe when time permits, try finishing the book. You have a very nice ability to relax the reader and you should be proud of yourself.

I wish you good luck in your projects! Sophie11Lightfoot ♥