Client: Scorpion3032

How it felt like when I was reading your book:

PLOT

The reason I am starting with this is because I feel like you are a newbie writer and are just completely new here. I need to welcome you to this Orange app ♥

Let's start with an example: Your first chapter.

While telling a story, one is supposed to narrate it. You have a pretty nice draft so all that is left is to put it into sentences instead of publishing it as dialogue writing. 

MARIA's POV

I was on my way to my locker to take my books for the next class when all of a sudden I felt cold water all over my head. Turning around I see Ava (Describe what she's wearing here). I wasn't shocked because these were like a common occurrence to me. 

AVA's POV

I was walking down the hallway when I saw the cry baby going towards her locker. Not turning this into an opportunity would be a total waste. So I walk up to her and did my thing; spilled water on her head and flicked her forehead.

Maria looked at me in despair. "Well deserved anyway. Where is the homework I told you to complete yesterday?" She begins to start stuttering and I am starting to lose my patience. "Yes Maria, where is my ho-ho-ho-homework?" I love mocking her. She's so naïve and powerless against me.

I highly suggest reading more books here to learn better. Every writer starts out as a reader and it's okay if you are not sure about what to write down. But I feel like you could a lot more amazing if you can take your time to read more and observe the different writing styles.

I wish you good luck in your works! Scorpion3032 ♥