Author: sisofthedevils
Book: Reason for your Eminence and Extermination.

COVER 📘:

This is really beautiful, a great improvement from your last cover. I love the background and the fonts, everything is just perfect.

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BLURB 📘:

I didn't really understand the blurb, that's because there were lots of names foreign to me, instead of reading the blurb, I was trying to pronounce Kurukshetra and other names correctly. I didn't understand anything till I read your first chapter, then I went back to the blurb and everything you were saying was clearer to me.

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FIRST CHAPTER 📘:

From the first chapter I got a clearer image on your blurb like I stated above, especially the Lord Krishaa and Draupadi part though for people who don't understand the whole concept about 'MAHABHARATA' like me, you can see why they might be confused by the blurb at first.

The first chapter was sought of like an introduction to the story and no dialogue was spotted. The grammar was great, I actually didn't spot errors and I am glad your work is well edited.

I love how you gave a bit of the background, while introducing your characters slowly to the readers.

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CHARACTERS 📘:

So far, you have done a great job in making your readers understand them.

Hridyaa is a good person, actually too good for my liking. I was really dissapointed when she agreed to take the blame when Jacen was the one that cheated on her on their anniversary. But I was proud when she broke the million dollar precious stone, but then when she backed down because he slapped her, I just wanted to kill him because that's what made her recoil. He is an asshole, I don't care about Doreen, she shouldn't have slept with someone's husband. Lucifer is an angel so far.

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PUNCTUATIONS 📘:

In the first chapter I didn't see much errors in this because there was no dialogue and most of the punctuational errors occurred in the dialogues.

The first one I noticed was the use of Interrobangs (?!)

"What are you saying?!" Hridyaa shouted.

It shouldn't be used in a dialogue, as I read it isn't appropriate unless it appears in texts conversations which is informal so that's ok. But when in dialogues, we should avoid using them.

The second thing I noticed was that you forgot to sometimes put the closing punctuation mark before putting the closing quotation, while this might have been a result of typing to fast.

I noticed one which was a mistake I usually made, it actually took me days to finally understand this properly. When to use a comma or a period when closing a dialogue.

Commas are used when a tag follows (e.g she says, he replied, I stammered, she muttered, he cried.)

Period are used when there is no tag for example.

"Just shut it, I don't want to hear anything to hear anything you have to say." She slammed the cup on the table.

A period is used because 'She slammed the cup on the table' isn't a tag to the dialogue, it's describing her actions, not anything on how the dialogue was said.

I noticed you didn't follow this, so I hope you now understand and can work on this.

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OVERALL 📘:

This is a good story with an amazing plot. It has a very unique plot, but what I love the most was how you combines the whole Lord Krishna to it. I don't understand the whole story about Lord Krishna or what it's about, but I do know it's something big and I love how some of it relates to Hridyaa plights and how she was able to learn from it. Nice story by the author.

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I am sorry this is coming late, I have been so busy. If you have any questions, let me know ❤️