Book Title: Till Sunrise

Author: ValerieEveDiestro

Genre: Oneshot

Reviewer: -forever-summer-

i) Cover: 6/10

The cover seemed too simple when I first saw your book. But then after reading the book, I understood the meaning behind it. Though it is simple, it suits the book well.

It may be overlooked by the readers, so I would suggest getting the cover done by a designer. There are a lot of designers on Wattpad that could help you with it.

ii) Title: 10/10

I liked your title very much. It was simple and very much related to the book. It made me wonder about the plot and piqued my interest. That's what a good title would do. So great job choosing the title.

iii) Blurb: 4/10

Firstly, the blurb seems to contain a lot of information put out in a small paragraph. The sentences aren't coherent and feel like they've been randomly placed.

I feel like you've shared a lot more information than what is needed in a blurb. The sentence framing and order could've been better.

iv) Plot: 8/10

The plot was good and new. I loved your thought process behind it. Her coming back (even for an evening) and his eyesight coming back were so nice and I kinda loved that part.

v) Writing flow and pace: 3/10

Though I loved your plot, I must say it wasn't executed well enough. It was kinda rushed and it jumped from scene to scene without any clear indication to the readers. It disrupts the reading flow and doesn't let the reader completely enjoy and immerse in the story.

It would have been easier if there was a star or symbol between paragraphs to indicate the time skip.

Also when past conversations are mentioned I like that you used italics to separate them from the present. But in a few parts, it wasn't italicized and I was a little confused when I read it. During their conversations, it feels like it was rushed.

vi) Writing Style: 7/10

Your writing style is good. I like it. I felt like a few sentences could be rewritten. And few sentences could be merged because the second sentence just seemed unnecessary.

For example, Instead of

To my surprise, I heard a familiar voice. Someone on the other line replied.

To my surprise, I heard a familiar voice on the phone. Could have been written. It reduces the words and is precise.

In some places, I felt like you could've phrased the sentence better. But if you keep writing you will be doing great and improve a lot.

vii) Character development: 7/10

Though I like and adore your character, I wasn't able to connect with them. So I couldn't get to see their development well. Since it is a one-shot and a plot-based story rather than a character-based story it was fine and understandable.

viii) Grammar and punctuation: 9/10

There weren't any visible grammatical errors. But at places, I felt like punctuation could've been added. Other than that it was good.

ix) Creativity: 8/10

The plot is creative and cute. It would be better if you try to be creative with the words too. It would make your book more attractive and all readers would love your book.

x) Genre relevance: 10/10

Since you had just mentioned it as a one-shot, it suits your book well and it is a very precise genre.

Total: 72/100

Your book is really good. If you work on your blurb and sentence structure, your book will be better. It will also reach more readers. If you need any help or have doubts regarding your review. Don't hesitate to contact me.

These are just my personal opinions and areas that I think you should work on. Please keep writing and reading books. All the best!