Author : -JILINS

Reviewer : sprite_and_hamburger

UNSEEN

Cover (2/10)

The cover isn't inviting tbh, it just looks like a pic rather than a cover and you just put the font over it. The colour of the font is also mismatched with the background. It didn't match the plot and it wasn't eye-catching. The font is way too simple and it doesn't go well with the background pic, it looks like the font doesn't belong to the background at all.

Title(3/5)

It's not so inviting but it's pertinent with the story. The title is fine but when you read more about the plot you will realise the title isn't satisfying enough and can be replaced with the more suitable one so I suggest you to read your plot and think of a title which can relate to your plot more. 

Synopsis (6/10)

The dialogue is quite inviting I like it. There is no much info about the story. You can add more preview or cliff hanger in this without revealing the plot.

Plot (20/30)

The flow of the plot is rushed but sometimes a bit smooth, it's quite messy. There are no prominent plot holes. The storyline is a cliché one cause we all read too many FF with the same plot. There are thousands of them and I didn't found something different in this plot.

Grammar (20/25)

I found a lot of grammatical errors that made me lose focus. The tense is linear. The punctuation marks are well place but there was a mistake. The main problem is capitalization, the author has a problem with capital letters. The character's name wasn't started with capital letters either.

Writing style (9/10)

The choice of words conveys the meaning well. It was a bit complex in the story. Some dialogues are relevant in the story. The writing style is smooth.

Overall

The author needs to put some more details in the plot, don't rush things to take it slow. The story needs a little editing. Change the cover or use different font and pic. Use capital letters when starting a new sentence or write someone's name.

Review Score : 62/100

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