✧ Reviewer :: 112313Parnika
✧ Reviewee :: TaliaRivers
✧ Book :: The Elves Of Trelis

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◖Basics :: 15.5 | 20◗

⚘ Cover :: 3.5 | 05

◍ The cover you made was very beautiful. The hard-work you did there is very appreciable. The cover was specific to the point. It explained the plot and also the genre which is fantasy. It was totally relatable. However, a digital version of the same would look more presentable. Then again, you're the author & yours is the last say.

⚘ Synopsis :: 3.5 | 05

◍ The synopsis was good. The summary was written in required word order and also gave enough info to attract me to the story. But the end question seemed a bit confusing. I think you should tell a bit about elves too and then ask the question.

⚘ Title :: 4.5 | 05

◍ I think the title is totally relatable to the story. The plot is based on the elf Phadia and it explains it well that what am I going to read in the story. It also is a simple but unique title which looks attractive.

⚘ Execution :: 04 | 05

◍ Don't put images in between chapters as it disturbs the flow. Try to put them in the start or the end of the chapter.

○ Plot & Creativity :: 08 | 10

◍ I got a bit confused at part of the trees. Though you did a great job in telling about elves and their daily life along with the story, some things confused me up. As it's a new and unique plot, even their culture related things should be detailed. You can tell more about their homes and it's systems. It would be more clear then why the home tree wasn't letting Yasmin in, what specialty it has so that it becomes more intriguing.

○ Writing Style :: 08 | 10

◍ I think the writing style was good when narration came, you told only the necessary things and the story was quite interesting. But I suggest you make the scenes a bit longer, like the part where conversation with the ghosts was happening. Or the time, when the creature was found.

◖Grammar & Vocabulary :: 13.5 | 20◗

⚘ Grammar :: 8.5 | 10

◍ In the chapter, the dance, you have written 'meself'; it should my myself. I didn't find any other grammatical error. Good work.

⚘ Vocabulary :: 05 | 10

◍ I think the Vocabulary was not used that much. Though new terms were used in the story as its for elves but still I feel you can work on this more. And use some new words, phrases or anything else to spark more interest.

○ Emotions Conveyed :: 08 | 10

◍ I feel the emotions of Razu could have been written in a bit more detail. I feel he is also an important character by the description given so in order to relate to him, understanding him also is important.

○ Character Development :: 9.5 | 10

◍ I think the character development was good and up to the mark. I felt relatable to the characters which is a good thing. The way you have described the thoughts of not only the lead but even other characters was appreciable.

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Total :: 62.5 | 80

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