✧ Reviewer :: 112313parnika
✧ Reviewee :: onestraykid
✧ Book :: The Hesitants

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◖Basics :: 10 | 20◗

⚘ Cover :: 01 | 05

◍ When I saw the cover, I didn't get an exact clue of what the book was about. The book deals with a plot relating to Zombie attack, so the cover should have the related theme and background which was mixing in this one. Also, the cover you chose for the book is a simple image, to attract readers, you need to make it attractive. What you can do is put relatable images like Zombies and make the theme accordingly, then you can assemble it which will make the cover better and it will be able to attract readers. For example, when I was reading a book relating to a vacation of a vampire, the cover had a cool background, like a holiday place and a vampire enjoying, also as it was of mystery genre, the main characters were shown spying on him, that gave me an exact idea of what I was going to read and made me interested to read the book.

⚘ Synopsis :: 04 | 05

◍ The blurb was good and it played its part. You described the plot well in the book description. I don't think it would need any improvement as of now. Just you can give an interesting start to it like asking about Zombies or an experience question where you ask readers what they will do in a situation like this. I feel these questions excite the readers and they read the book.

⚘ Title :: 02 | 05

◍ I didn't understand the meaning of the title clearly. It wasn't relatable to the plot as it didn't match with the theme of the book. Hence, it didn't attract me that much as it should. So you need to choose something specific, short yet attractive name for your book which exactly points out what will I get inside the book.

⚘ Execution :: 03 | 05

◍ The cover and title didn't excite me that much but the plot was good and unique. Though it can be described more but the dialogues and the way they were written did entertain me. Synopsis did its work well.

○ Plot & Creativity :: 06 | 10

◍ I would suggest you take the plot a little bit slower. The speed of the plot moving was ok but it can be improved. I feel the attack can be described, when it has been mentioned, whatever happened in the shop was too fast. Also during the attack scene, I feel the situation, location and other criteria's that make a scene interesting need to be explained.

○ Writing Style :: 07 | 10

◍ I think the writing style of yours is good. Some dialogues were humorous, some looked sad and they went along with what the plot required. Just you can increase the length of the chapters according to the improvements, I suggested you to do.

◖Grammar & Vocabulary :: 14 | 20◗

⚘ Grammar :: 09 | 10

◍ I didn't find any grammatical mistake which was good. But there's always a room for improvement.

⚘ Vocabulary :: 05 | 10

◍ I think the vocabulary usage should be more in the book. Now as its about Zombies, you can tell a bit about them so that readers know exactly why they are the villains here and why characters need to fight them. Though its common name and people know this creature but its possible, many are not familiar with it so in that way, new terms will come up which will increase vocabulary and make book content more creative and interesting.

○ Emotions Conveyed :: 04 | 10

◍ The emotions need a lot of improvement. Readers generally try to think as characters when characters are like an open book to them. If their thoughts aren't shared then it becomes confusing and readers aren't able to relate to characters. When Zombies were attacking, they must have felt terror, fear and confusion. That's the point, where it becomes necessary to describe all emotions they are feeling, so that readers can get attached to the characters and enjoy reading the book.

○ Character Development :: 05 | 10

◍ The character development is linked to how much screen space they get. As the scenes were too small and emotions and thoughts weren't described that well, the development also needs improvement. Like in case of Y/N and her initial encounters with the boys, the same lines have been repeated again and again but Y/N's reaction and thoughts aren't that much clear, also that scene ends fasts. So along with the attack, you need to focus on characters and their screen space too.

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Total :: 46 | 80

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