The truth about ladybugs by: TheTiffTur
Requested by: TheTiffTur

I want to say that the first thing I noticed about your story was that it was labeled as a general fiction novel and not a mystery or teen fiction story which I don't get because it comes across as being either a mystery or teen fiction novel and not a general fiction novel plus the summary also makes it seem like it as well. So, I would suggest that you change the genre of your story because it doesn't seem to fit in the general fiction genre at all. Also I could only read one chapter of this book because it jumped from chapter 1 to chapter 3 and didn't have a chapter 2 to it at all so I was left confused on what was going on because I didn't know what had happened in chapter 2 that lead up to chapter 3 so, I stopped reading it due this missing gap. Readers are going to be confused on what's going on as well because it isn't explained well and will be lost on what happened and will only read the first chapter and nothing else if there's no chapter 2.

Plus I was also confused on what was going on with the stepdad and son because it was in middle of the action and I felt like it doesn't set up the story well at all. The summary does a good job at what your story is about and it comes across like we're expected to know what's already happening but it doesn't do this well whatsoever.

There's no build up to it and you don't really get to see what the main male lead's relationship is like with his parents before he became famous,his stepdad being blackmailed and why his relationship with his mom is sour.

Overall, it has potential but it doesn't have that good of a story structure and you might want to go back and edit it a bit more and have the plot thought out a bit better before publishing it because you seem a bit unsure on what to do with the story it's self.

Thanks for letting me review your book.

-Traveler_lilly