✨ THE DEAD MISTRESS by PeherKothari

Title and Cover:
The title seems pretty intriguing and in a way gives a little glimpse into the story but still manages the curiosity factor. However, a little more work is needed in the cover part. It is a nice one but it does not go well with the genre given.

Blurb:
A nice attempt! However, a little more effort is needed. What you have written in here seems like an introduction of the characters that we will be reading about in the story. So, please, if possible, research a bit more on how to write a blurb.

A brief comment:
# To start with, I would say that it was a really smart way of presentation. By dividing the whole story into smaller chapters, you’ve ruled out the possibility of any confusion regarding the characters as the gif and the individual titles of the chapters gave a pretty good idea of what new character will be introduced in the chapter. Well done!

# Coming to the plot, the story was amazing. The way you’ve used the catch was wonderful. The paranormal part of the genre was maintained appreciably well and for a change, our heart goes out to the ghost this time.

# You’ve tried maintaining the regency part quite nicely. Though the dialogues were framed as per the timeline in which the story was set, still something felt amiss. Maybe you could have thrown a little light on the etiquette and society of that time. That would have made the story even more amazing. But I know the word limit made it a little difficult. Overall, it was a pretty nice effort!

# However, you have completely missed the romance part completely. I know that the genre was a difficult one but still a little more focus on this aspect was expected.

# Though, you haven’t exactly used the given word, you’ve used its meaning. Good work! But the usage of the word would have been even more appreciable!

Grammar and narration:
There aren’t any major flaws when it comes to the grammar and narration part. Your narration is good. There were some grammatical errors which you can rectify with a quick proof reading and editing. Other than that, it was all pretty much fine!

Concluding remark:
Overall, it was really an amazing read. The twists and turns were the cherry on the cake. I enjoyed the story thoroughly. You, as a writer, have a lot of potential. All the best ❤️👍🏻

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✨ THE PATH TO NOWHERE by niyati2701

Title and Cover:
The title is a pretty simple one. It is nice but I feel you can do a little better. The cover gives out a historical mystery vibe. I really liked it but a little different font would have made it even better. Good work!

Blurb:
I loved the way the blurb has been framed. You have maintained the curiosity factor aptly and the blurb is just enough for me to have a look at your story. Very interesting and a really intriguing one.

A brief comment:
# It was an amazing read! I loved Manu’s character development from a carefree and naughty girl to a fierce warrior. The way her father sacrificed her for the kingdom, showed his loyalty for their king. And Manu was, undoubtedly, the best daughter he could have asked for.

# You have used the catch wonderfully. The fearsome demon gave us chills. Use of the given word was a good one, but I still feel you could have done a little better.

# You have managed the keep up with the genre quite well. The beginning of the story itself had me intrigued, and the interest was not lessen anywhere throughout the story. Well done! However, I felt the romance part a little missing and there was a little more scope in that aspect.

# Ending of the story was something unexpected. I was not expecting her to die on the first day of the mission itself. Maybe if you could have explored their relationship a little more and then making Manu breath her last on the day he revealed everything would have made it a little better. This is just a little small suggestion from my side.

Grammar and narration:
Your narration is good. It just needs a little more practice. However, you need to work on your grammar properly. There were quite some noticeable errors. So, I would suggest a thorough proof reading and editing.

Concluding Remark:
Overall, it was fantastic. Just like a roller coaster ride, it had me on the edges. You have a lot of potential and you can definitely do a lot better. All the best ❤️👍🏻

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✨ STARCROSSED LOVERS by wallflower_words

Title and Cover:
The title was a good one. It went with your story quite well. However, the cover didn’t appeal much to me. It was good but I feel the coloring effect and the font can be a little better.

Blurb:
The blurb was penned down really well. It had the knack of intriguing the readers, and make them to have a look at the story. It was quite an interesting one. Good work at that!

A brief comment:
# The story was absolutely fantastic. I enjoyed it thoroughly. The story brought in the message that no matter what, what’s fated to be will happen. Really appreciable!

# You have carried the genre really well. There were all the three required elements of historical, paranormal and romance. The plot was pretty interesting and you have managed to carry the storyline quite well. Well done!

# I really liked the portrayal of the given word. However, I felt that if you could have laid a little more emphasis on Jayesh’s dreams, it would have been even better.

# The ending was pretty unexpected and I wasn’t actually expecting Advika to stab herself. I thought that somehow Jayesh would be the one to kill her. Well, in a way, he was, though not physically. I wish she would have known about his dreams. Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading it.

Grammar and narration:
Your narration is pretty good. I loved your vocabulary in here. However, there were quite some noticeable mistakes when it comes to the grammar. So, please pay a little more attention to that aspect. I would suggest a quick proof reading and editing.

Concluding remark:
It was a full on roller coaster ride and I enjoyed it thoroughly. Your story telling skills are pretty good. A little more effort and you have the potential to do wonders. All the best ❤️👍🏻

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