~ A JOURNEY TOWARDS HATE BY ankitha21 ~

Title and Blurb:
A really nice title that suited your story well and the blurb was a good one. But you need to work a little on it.

Review:
- The beginning of the story was quite good where a couple was in love and later their love turned into marriage. The moments were sweet and Mitra was, undoubtedly, very adorable.

- Your narrations were simple and that made it pretty easy for the readers to understand.

- There were some grammatical mistakes which you can certainly improve, but not any major ones.

- The catch was used nicely. However, usage of the word ‘misogamist’ was missing; it was used only at the end. I think you could use it in a better way.

- Moreover, I feel that the character 'Nisha’ needs to be defined a little more as a mother.

- In a nutshell, it was a good story but this plot has a lot of potential to be even better. Good luck!

~ MENDING HER HEART BY wallflower_words ~

Title and Blurb:
A wonderful combination of a simple title and an interesting blurb. That definitely makes the readers to open the book and have a look at what’s inside.

Review:
- Loved the development of both characters and how they came around to understand each other. The moments between Raveena and Pradeep were pretty sweet.

- However, the usages of catch and given word (misogamist) were missing in the story. There was some good scope for the description about the given catch.

- I felt that meeting someone and going straightaway for sex was something strange. It’s possible that there was some back story but I wasn’t able to find any link for this act of theirs.

- But the later part was quite interesting where they fell in love with each other. It was sweet.

- Your grammar and narration were pretty good and appreciable. What I really liked was your vocabulary. It was neither too tough nor too simple.

- In a nutshell, it was a good story but it needed a few improvements at the same time. Good luck!

~ CORNERING LILY THOMAS BY Gokka_Makka ~

Title and Blurb:
Definitely, an interesting title. But I feel you need to do some work on the blurb. It was good but it could be more interesting.

Review:
- The story began with a cute note as Irai’s father challenged Lily to capture his sons heart, which was revealed at the end that it was all a part of the plan ‘Cornering Lily Thomas’. Well done!

- A little more work is needed in the section of Grammar and punctuation. What I liked in your story was your vocabulary, quite a good one.

- However, the use of word ‘misogamist’ was missing. Instead, I found the word Philomisia, which means hatred of love. But somehow you managed to carry the meaning of misogamist.

- The use of catch was pretty good.

- The change in the point of views tends to confuse the readers, so, I would suggest you to avoid doing that.

- In a nutshell, it was a cute story but needs some improvement. Good luck!

~ HEAL MY HEART BY angelshiva ~

Title and Blurb:
A nice title that suited your story well. I really liked your blurb. It was beautiful.

Review:
- The theme and plot of the story was quite appreciable but seemed a bit diverted from the given genre.

- You’ve used the catch pretty well. Though, the given word was used only once, there was some more scope of making the presentation even better. Your story seemed quite promising.

- Narration of the story was good, the way feeling and emotions were described was quite appreciable. The poem at the end made it even more beautiful.

- You need work a little on the grammar. There were some errors but you can definitely improve them with time. The vocabulary you’ve used is quite good.

- However, the story must have a romantic angle which was somewhat missing. Exploring it would have made your story even more beautiful.

- The efforts for plot development and your style of description is really praise worthy. You can definitely do much better. Good luck!

~ BROKEN BUT BEAUTIFUL BY snowcrystal- ~

Title and Blurb:
I really liked your title. It gave us a glimpse of what the story might be holding. The Blurb was well written.

Review:
- It was really a good story of a young couple who were against commitments and relationships because of their own personal reasons. And how they found their way towards love.

- The various incidents in the story were beautifully described.

- The narration was nice but there were some grammatical mistakes which you need to look into. I would suggest a quick editing.

- You’ve used the catch pretty well. However, I feel that you could have described the word misogamist a little more.

- The title, ‘Broken but Beautiful’, suited the story pretty well. Despite their own personal scars they fell for each other and the unexpected ending was quite appreciable.

- In a nutshell, it was a good story with pretty good timing of emotions and romance. Good luck!

~ MARRIAGE! SIGH! BY NikkithaKJ ~

Title and Blurb:
A really nice title. I liked it! The blurb was nice with all those questions but I feel it could be even better.

Review:
- A sweet yet creative story of two persons who get married unwillingly and later fall in love with each other. The way you’ve penned it down is quite smart.

- The narration and the description of the story were quite good. Though simple, it made the story interesting.

- However, I felt like there was more scope for exploring the love relationship between Aadya and Hitesh.

- The meaning of the given word (misogamist) was used in the story but not the word itself. Though it wasn’t necessary but I feel using the word would have been a little better.

- Your grammar and vocabulary was pretty good. The happy ending of the story was quite appreciable. You have a lot of potential. Good luck!

~ SAPTAPADI – AGNISAKSHI BY IshaniDurbaPurkayast ~

Title and Blurb:
A nice title. Something different. The blurb was good but I feel you can do better.

Review:
- The story was a good one. Both the flashback and present moments were nicely presented.

- Though you’ve tried maintaining the Young Adult genre, I felt the romance part a bit missing. The link between the different phases of Sakshi’s and Agni’s life was somewhere missing.

- The catch was used in a good way but we found the glimpse of the word misogamist only at the end of the story. However, the development of character and the dialogues were pretty much appreciable.

- I wish the ending was a little more interesting but, in a nutshell, a good story and I’m pretty sure you can do even better. Good luck!

~ BLURRED LINES BY Nita_Reid ~

Title and Blurb:

A really good title that suited your story pretty well. I really liked it! The blurb was nice and gave us a brief idea of what the story was all about.

Review:
- The story began at a good note with Avinash’s inner conflict. His meeting with Roshini was pretty cute.

- Your narration is pretty good and the way the story line developed is really appreciable. I liked the smoothness in your story. However, the story lacked somewhere in exploring the love relationship between Avinash and Roshini; it was more like friendship and liking.

- Your grammar is good but had some minor mistakes here and there which you can definitely improve with time.

- The way you’ve used the catch is pretty much appreciable but I wasn’t able to find a proper use of the word ‘misogamist’. I feel you could have defined it in a better way.

- In a nutshell, it was a good story that carried an important social message. Just a lit bit of improvement and you can do wonderful. Good luck!

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