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Hello wonderful hunters,

As you know, the first draft is done, and now I'm moving on towards the next step: perfecting the draft. There will be reductions, there will be additions. All redundancies will be removed, and those annoying typos will be corrected.

Now doing the latter is quite easy (if I spot these errors, that is). Don't worry, I won't bother you to go through the story again for such a pesky job. I need you for something far more important.

Please go through this list, and tell me if our thoughts align. Please tell me if these changes should really be made, or I'm simply panicking. Do comment your thoughts.

¶ Laura's POV

I've decided to remove the povs of other characters entirely in order to bring uniformity and consistency in the story. Throughout the story there are (or there will be more) instances where Laura is forced to consider if Sebastian is really a friend. Introducing Sebastian's pov (and thereby telling that he really cares) would destroy this drama, which is important in book 2. Hence only Laura's voice will prevail.

¶ Characters

I personally feel that except Pamela, the rest of the characters often go out-of-character. Like Laura shouldn't be so daring at the initial part (during the 'job' thing ) or even at the beginning, when she was surrounded by six demons. Also, I don't think Laura should be so cocky. Since at the beginning she is so timid, I don't think she'd go all fake FBI, not at least yet. (right?)

As my mind sees it, she's a timid character and grows bold only toward the end of book 1.

And Sebastian seemed so painfully caring. I'd really planned him to be a cold character. So at the beginning chapters of Devil's Moon, he'll act a lot colder. However, as the story progresses, he'll fall for her and hence grow softer.

Regarding Pamela, I think there are not many issues. (are there? *looks nervously*)

¶ The opening

Here's where I'm uncertain. Does the book require another interesting opening? I think the Alzaknos dream wasn't that bad. It wasn't plain boring at the least. But you guys know better.

Also, the initial 3-4 chapters, I think, are quite slow (talking about pace). Hence I'm considering to redo those chapters. Do I really need to?

¶ The 'Job' Chapters

Does the subheading ring a bell? Yes, I'm talking about those two slightly out-of-the-main-plot chapters where Laura and Sebastian went on missions they really didn't need to (well, if money was a problem, and Sebastian wasn't a gentleman back then, stealing would be a more probable option, right? Kidding. He's too honourable to do that. I'll think of something else)

So I was planning to delete those two chapters entirely, and add something more probable. Like instead of they finding trouble (jobs), the trouble finds them.

¶ Overall pacing

Do you guys think that at points the book was too slow, or too fast. I think the beginning was annoyingly slow, and the end was extremely fast-paced (Seb, Laura, and Pam didn't get pretty much anything to eat for like 3-4 days! I really messed up there). Please tell me I'm wrong :P

¶ A new character?

Is the general plot development until the mid of the book interesting? Did you get bore because there were only two characters (Laura and Seb)? Do I need to introduce an entirely new temp character (and kill him somewhere at the middle of the book)? Or introduce Pamela earlier to make things interesting?

Please note that doing any of these changes would require me to put a huge amount of time, brain power, and ink (scratch that, I type). So please tell me to do so, if and only if the first half really made you sleep.

¶ History lessons

According to my original plan, I wasn't going to talk about history of the Hunter World, especially Casstelia, until the middle part of book 2. But then I realised it'd be stretching things a bit too far. So I've decided to include some history stuff in book 1 itself.

¶ Casstelia

I really love this name. But unfortunately I'll have to change it.

A) 'Casstelia' sounds oddly connected with the character 'Castiel'

B) Ever watched/played pokemon? Yes, now it's more clear why I want to change the name.

¶ Sebastian

I know you guys must've been secretly hoping that I'd mention this revision.

Unfortunately, no, I stick by my decision. (Bwahahahaha) XD

But there's a little chance he might just reincarnate in book 2. This is a paranormal story after all :P

(This statement does not necessarily mean I'll bring him back. Sorry, I can't be very clear at this moment.)

¶ Pamela's disappearance:

I realise that the way Pamela was thrown out of the war scene was pretty lame. "Where you going?"  and poof. Hence I was thinking of redoing that scene.

¶ Villain

So let's list down the members of the bad side. There's Delroy, then Alzaknos and Gudruk, and finally Melissa. Initially, I had decided to give each of them different voice (like say one is sarcastic and the other one all serious and dark). As you've seen, I got carried away by the momentum of the plot, and hence forgot implementing this decision.

Hence, the second draft would also correct the villainous voices.

¶ War of the Moons

The current ending of the book is quite different from the one I had in mind for over a year. Hence the 'War of the Moons' thing is also relatively new in my mind. Hence anything related to it has been mentioned in the book only toward the end. I feel this information should be laced carefully in the book. So I'll be letting the characters know of this history stuff only a few days after they discovered that Anahita has taken Laura's mental apartment.

¶ The seven blondies

According to the story, Anahita was sealed into the seven members of the Deathstones. Every one of these passed their 'piece' of Anahita, to their children once they grew older (and weaker). And now, after sixty years, these pieces were carefully hidden in the psyches of seven girls.
(please go through the FAQ for detailed explanation)
Six of these girls (Catherine Chase, Diana Williams, Lucy and others) were murdered by Clara so that these six pieces find Laura (where the strongest piece of Anahita lived) and the pieces would combine to form Anahita again, which was necessary for breaking the seal.

Since all these girls are connected through Anahita, I thought I could use more drama. Like when one of these seven dies, Laura would have a dream in which she'll die the same way that character died.

Good idea, or a bad one?

¶ Anything else that annoyed you?

Okay, so this is the list of things that needed a bit of redoing, according to me. Please tell me if there are other things you want to see changed.