For @FireAndBright. Next oc will be Snowstar.

Name: Freya/Flame/Maplelily

I like the name Freya. I haven't seen it often/at all, and it's cute!! Flame is a really overused name, but the name Maplelily makes up for it. It's.. Awesome!? -lily is a very cute, underused suffix. Maple- is more common, but I still love it, and it goes very well with -lily :3

Gender: She-cat

Not sure what to say here so here is a pic of my v beautiful cat

Appearance: She has long, rich, red fur that seems to glow in the sunlight, and golden-amber eyes. She is a purebred kittypet, and therefore is not a tabby, but at a distance one might mistake her long, jagged scars for tabby markings.

Coooooooooool

This is also awesome. I like the red fur, that's very underused. And the jagged scars are a super awesome touch, I'm blown away by how creative this is! Everything from the eye color to the fur that seems to glow is just.. Like... Awesomeness? Very original, nice nice nice.

Clan: Kittypet/Loner/RiverClan

Oh really o.o she seems more Thunder or Shadow to me, I didn't expect River. But cool !

Rank: Kittypet/Loner/Apprentice/Warrior

Another picture of my sweet sweet kitty

Personality: Sweet and kind, helping others whenever she can. Her past makes her understand the pain of other cats well, and she always seems to know the right words to say. She's never been held back by her kindness - she will fight like a thousand warriors if the need arises. However, if she thinks someone can win their own battles, she will leave them to do it themselves.
She has trust in cats to be who they are, but never fully trusts a cat with anything. She's not afraid of telling lies, but she tries to avoid it when possible. She always does what she thinks is best for others - whether or not that includes her. She will always pay back debts, and expects others, if a good time arises, to do the same to her.
However, revenge can cloud her thoughts, and she finds it almost impossible to push it away. When other cats complain about tiny little things, especially knowing what she's been through, she hates them for it. Her experience makes her wise, but not clever and her pure kittypet ancestry makes her weaker for not having the same variation in genes as other cats.

This is legit the longest personality description I've ever gotten. I don't think I could be this descriptive about myself O.O what could I possible have a problem with here? She seems very well thought out, I can tell you put a lot of time into making her character just PERFECT. Not perfect as in, she has no flaws— her personality is very balanced and it has been formed by her past experiences, which is epic.

👏 I APPLAUD YOU 👏

Backstory: Freya was born a kittypet. Her parents had been selected to create a pure red cat (the narrow gene pool caused her a few problems in later life) and her whole family were together, but she was taken away from them when she was about a moon old. Her kittypet owners were nice, but she always longed for a new life and when she was about eight moons old, she left them.
At first, her new life was hard, but settled into life as a loner quickly, with the new name of Flame. She had a few close friends from time to time, but they slowly drifted away. "Then, one day, she ventured into the twolegplace, and met a tom - Olly.
He was nice to her at first, and she managed to convince herself that she was in love. But he bullied her and hurt her, and eventually she could take no more. She ran away, but the next day he caught up with her.
She dragged herself into the forest to d¡e but a young warrior of ThunderClan, Frostfall, found her. Although the leader at that time, Sparrowstar, hated loners because one of them had k¡lled his mother, Frostfall used her close friendship with Brackenpaw, the medicine cat apprentice, to heal Flame in secret. When she left, they offered her a place in the clan, but she refused. She thanked them, and never saw them again. But Olly found her scent and knew she was alive. He told her that if she didn't come to him every week then he would k¡ll her for real next time. He would watch her until her final breath.
Later on in life, she found another cat from ThunderClan. Fallenbreeze was badly injured, and the infection in her shoulder would have k¡lled her if Flame had seen her only a few days later. Using the knowledge of herbs she had picked up from Frostfall and Brackenpaw, she nursed this cat back to health, and discovered that Froststar was now leader, Brackencloud now a full medicine cat - and when the cat Fallenbreeze had been in love with had tried to k¡ll her, Froststar had believed the would-be rnurderer. They shared their problems, and Fallenbreeze insisted they do something about Olly.
They attacked him together, but Flame wasn't very good, Fallenbreeze still had an injured shoulder and Olly was strong as ever. They retreated before they could get seriously hurt, and Fallenbreeze, unable to think of anything else to do, sent Flame to RiverClan. She settled in quickly, taking the name Maplepaw, but had no idea whether her frie safe. It was about half a moon later that she realised she was pregnant, with the kits of a monster inside her, and a moon later when she was given the name Maplelily, as a warrior.
A she-cat from ThunderClan joined RiverClan, bringing news of Shadewhisper, a warrior who had tried to kill her when she became deputy. The first thing that came to Maplelily's mind was Fallenbreeze's fate, but she never mentioned anything.
When the kits came, she named them Fallenkit and Frostkit. That was when the former ThunderClan deputy, Rowanlily, approached her, and Maplelily discovered that she was Fallenbreeze's sister. But Rowanlily was still distrusted by RiverClan and Maplelily didn't want to leave her kits, so they waited until Fallenflower and Frostdapple were warriors.
In that time, Maplelily found that she was falling in love with another tom - Briarsky, but she didn't say anything, after the mistakes she had made before.
Maplelily and Rowanlily asked their leader for permission, and searched for Fallenbreeze for days, but they never found her, and the sorrow of the moment where she had to turn back and forget about her friend still weighs Maplelily down with grief. But when they arrived back at RiverClan, Briarsky admitted his love, Maplelily had their kits, and, even without Fallenbreeze, she could be happy.

This is the longest backstory I've gotten probably. Holy crap.

This is so creative and original. I'm blown away honestly. Everything from the beginning seems to be so.. Unique. I like the Cinderpelt-Littlecloud feels here, you know I am a sucker for Littlecloud :3

I can't really find a single thing wrong with this. I feel like I don't have much to say but... Wow!

(I'm sorry it's so long. I can't really think of a way to shorten it.)

It's fine

Family:
Mate - Olly - Strong, muscular, black and white tom with brown eyes

This cat reminds me of my cat. His name is Oliver, which is similar to Olly. He's also black and white. Only difference is that mine is fat af :l

Compare

Kits - Frostkit(dapple) - White and ginger she-cat with hazel eyes

She sounds beautiful ;-;

Fallenkit(flower) - Black and white she-cat with amber eyes

I really like the prefix Fallen

Mate - Briarsky - Grey, silver and white tom with blue eyes
Kits -Flamekit(sky) - Ginger tom with yellow eyes
Lilackit(lily) - Silver and grey she-cat with blue eyes
Smokekit(bird) - Grey tom with amber eyes
Mother, father & siblings - Unknown

They're all so nice. Simple pelt designs, but still quite original!! Nice

.~*OVERALL*~.

I love this oc a lot. I'm going to give you a 10/10! Haven't done that in a while, but I couldn't find anything wrong with this if I wanted to. Wonderful job ~