For @Warrior_at_Heart. Next oc will be Poppyfall.

Name: Raven That Soars To The Moon (Raven)

Cool, I like ravens. But Tribe names tend to leave out the word "the." Raven That Soars to Moon would be better, and shorter. Otherwise, this is pretty good. I support the raven and his mission to be the first bird on the moon.

Gender: She-cat... IM SORRY OK??? Girls are just SOOO much more awesome than boys because we're smart and pretty and stuff. And dudes aren't. ~A message from a female... ❤️

I wasn't even gonna say anything but honestly you sound like a sexist who never grew out of the "ew boys r icky" phase most of us had back in kindergarten

Appearance: All black with purple eyes

Eh. TheEntireStarClan pointed out in a comment that purple eyes are possible, so thanks for that. But they just seem like a Mary-Sue kinda thing. While Raven isn't a Mary-Sue, I just don't like purple eyes. As for the pelt color, plain black is... well, plain. I'd like to see a more unique fur color.

Tribe: The Tribe of Flying Jays

I support the jays and their flights

Rank: Prey-Hunter

Okay

Personality: Speaks her mind, isn't fond of toms, clumsy, stubborn, calm, good stalker, good tracker

I like this.. sorta. I've been seeing more and more Jayfeather type cats.. stubborn, speaks their mind, etc. She has flaws, which is good, but honestly I'm getting tired of this personality type.

Backstory: Raven was born to Brook Where Small Fish Swim and Stormfur (second litter). She had two brothers and a sister. When she was 4 moons, the tribe split into three due to not enough food. The tribes became a day and a halfs walk between them. Raven and her brother, Pebble That Rolls Down Mountain (Pebble), both hated being inside a cave. They chose to go live with Jay Nest Where Eggs Hatch (Jay) or, better known as, Teller of the Pointed Stones (Stoneteller). There, Raven and Pebble stuck together as To-be's. Raven and Pebble were both linear, so they were made Prey-Hunters. When Raven took on a mate, she found out that he didn't really love her. He loved her sister, Snow Where Moss Hides (Snow). Pebble convinced her to act like she didn't care. She agreed and decided to just ignore toms and stay away from them, before she gets attached. Moons later, she found out Stormfur had died of a dog attack on his way to see her. Raven was devastated. She mourned for moons. Pebble tried to keep her spirits up. Eventually, Stoneteller came to see her. She said that Stormfur would want her to move on (Cliche warrior thing, I know). She did a few weeks later. She settled down as a Prey-Hunter and enjoyed her life where she didn't deal with toms.

This is awesome, actually. I don't have any problems with it. I love the Tribe splitting up, how you mixed canon cats and ocs, etc. This was very well done and I can't see anything wrong with it.

Mother: Brook Where Small Fish Swim (Brook)
Father: Stormfur (Dead)

Two of my favorite cats to be honest. I was so pissed when Stormfur joined the Tribe. And you killed him :( you jerk

Sister(s): Snow Where Moss Hides (Snow)

Cute name, ten outta ten

Brother(s): Pebble That Rolls Down Mountain (Pebble), Tree That Lightning Strikes (Tree)

I'm 99% sure that Pebble is a canon name, actually. She's my favorite Tribe cat :(

·~*OVERALL*~·
7/10. Her personality and appearance just seem bland. I'd remove the "the" from her name if you can. Her backstory was great, I'm mad at you for killing my baby Stormfur