Step one on how to make a bad book: Lets make it original... hmmm.. How about Moon and Sunclan!? Its never been used! So original!

Now lets make original and rare names! :0 Lets give our character a never before used name like... Silverkit! Now we make her look like Silverstream!. Perfect! Now we give the leader no flaws and make the villan totally not obvious! :3

Moonclan:

Leader:(Totally original Name)
Firestar, a orange pelt with green eyes. Is related to Firestar. Is the purest and dose not have flaws.

Deputy:
Squirreltail, a calico she cat

Medicine cat:
Herbleaf

Warriors: (Lets make them more powerful then Sunclan! :3)

Alderbite
          Apprentice:Badgerpaw
Snakebite
          Apprentice: Frogpaw
Greyfur
       Apprentice: Rainpaw
Nightclaw

Darkpelt

Shineyfur
          Apprentice: Sagepaw

Apprentices:

Badgerpaw, a brown tabby with gold harsh eyes. Is mean and trains for the darkforest (hid the villan very well! :3)

Sagepaw

Frogpaw

Rainpaw

Queens:

Moonshine(Mother to Silverkit, Williowkit, and Swankit)

Raggedear (Mother to Lionkit, Tigerkit, and Lepoardkit)

Elders:
Mouseflight

Voleflight

Sunclan:

Now lets make the other clan have less warriors so we are over powered! :)

Leader:
Waterstar

Deputy:
Streamface

Medicine cats:
Leaftail
Marrigoldpaw

Warriors:
Sunshine

Solarfur

Pantherclaw
         Apprentice: Rippedpaw
Apprentices:
Rippedpaw

Queens:
Stella (Expecting Pantherclaw's kits)

Sugerheart (Mother to Snowkit and Duckkit)

Elders:
Featherpelt

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How to fix this. First of all make Original clan names. Fire, Water, Sun, and Moonclan are too over used. Unless its not a future of one of the original five clans then be original! Snowclan? Its getting better but more original! Im posting a story soon so don't steal any thing from their! Savgeclan? Hopeclan? Good! Those aren't used as often! Good job! No make original names! Don't make the villan always a brown tabby! 90% of the time their a brown tabby and tom. Be original!  How about a silver she-cat named Flowerblossom? Its less obvious who the villan is!