Bronze

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For @KatLuv13. Other people commented before you but I didn't realize 'cuz my notifications messed up.. so uh... you're first.

Name: Bronze
Hmm. Bronze seems more like a name for a MudWing, but this is good. It's not too overused from what I've seen, it's not super unique but I'll let it slide. Like, looking at this name, I'd give it an "eh."

Gender: Female (how surprising! I'm sure you're shocked!)

Female ocs are just so uncommon (sarcasm, duh)

Tribe: None officially, as she's a hybrid of Sandwing and Rainwing

Hybrids, in my opinion, are way overused. They're not that common in the books, but super common in fanfiction. However, I don't think I've seen SandWing-RainWing before, so this is quite cool.

Rank: Since she has no tribe, none officially, but she always causes chaos everywhere and is known as the 'Shadow Stalker' in many of the kingdoms

Hmm. It seems like too many ocs aren't part of any tribe, there's always the "away from the tribe" kinda thing going on. I like the 'Shadow Stalker' thing. This is alright.

Residence: Bronze lives no where, as she moves around a lot.

Fair enough.

Appearance: None specifically, as she can change her appearance at will (Rainwing), but she has a curled tail like a Rainwing's, she can shoot venom, and has a poisonous tail end. She also has bronze colored eyes, which she can't change.

That explains the name then. She seems to resemble RainWings more than SandWings, but that's alright.

I love the detail included about her eyes. Does not being able to change them include camouflage? That would be pretty sucky. She'd have to close her eyes or else they'd show up with the rest of her invisible.

Personality: She's not the friendliest and is very sarcastic. She's clever and sneaky and a great liar. She loves chaos and does whatever she can to cause it since she always seemed weird so when she causes problems people don't notice her oddness. She's been called insane before by many but isn't really, she's just misunderstood and unique.

Hello Glory

Not really what I would expect from a RainWing, which is good. I like it when dragons aren't stereotypical. I like that she's unusual, but that seems to be... all she is? Idk, you should focus more on other parts of her personality, too.

Family: Her mother is a Rainwing named Canopy. Her father is a Sandwing named Venom. She has a brother named Silver and a sister named Gold. Gold lives with Skywings (long story) and Silver lives with the Sandwings.

I like Canopy. Venom is kind of common, but oh well. I like that her name matches her siblings'.

I also have an oc named Silver lol

Backstory: Bronze was born in the Rainwing village to Canopy. She was the leader of her group of siblings. Gold was rejected by the other Rainwings because she couldn't change her scales. She was more of a Sandwing. Gold soon left the tribe and ended up in the Skywing palace, working for Queen Cavern (different era, much after the dragonets of destiny, so totally different characters). Silver left as well for the Sandwing kingdom, hoping to find their father. Bronze was upset. The other Rainwings thought she was odd... able to change her scales, but didn't sleep much at all. She was teased for this. Eventually she accidentally stabbed a young dragonet with her tail. He dìed. Bronze was exiled. She travelled Pyrrhia, and met a Nightwing dragonet named Shadow. The two became friends. Shadow had been exiled too, because she was different. She could read minds (which was rarer, but not unheard of) and she could also turn invisible. The other Nightwings did not like that. The two wound up in the Seawing kingdom, and they caused an accident that kílled one of the princesses. They formed a legacy known as the Shadow Stalkers. They would seek out different dragons and take them in- so far in their ranks are Spiral, a Skywing that can slow down and speed up time, Tundra, an Icewing who can breathe fire, and Fox, a Seawing/Sandwing hybrid who can control other animal's minds. The five of them still travel Pyrrhia, in search of more to join their ranks. All they want is to form a new tribe where different dragons can be themselves.

I really like the whole "group of misfits" thing. It's kind of strange that Gold ended up in the Sky Kingdom when she's not even part SkyWing, but oh well. I'm judging Bronze.

I think this is pretty cool. The whole outcast storyline is a bit overused, but at least the RainWings had a good reason for it.

Overall

6/10. She's.. alright? Nothing about this oc really stands out. Hybrids are way overused, and the name/appearance is alright, but nothing unusual. Her personality could use some work, and overall she's just "meh."

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