For Moonflight_02 :3

Name: Crystal

Hmmm. It's not the most original name, but it is pretty, and it fits her tribe. I like it!

Gender: Female

Ok

Tribe: IceWing

I love IceWings but honestly.... they're a bit overused

I mean not that I can speak like half of my ocs are IceWings I love them

Rank in Tribe: Orb Collector
An orb collector is like a crystal, but bigger, and very Very rare. There's orbs for every tribe, but only different in color(because of tribe, like IceWing is blue). So orbs are where you can change appearance, but there will always be one feature if you real self that will stay on you no matter what you try changing into. So if Crystal has a scratch on her leg, then even if she has a NightWing orb, and she turns into a NightWing, she will always have that scratch.

That's pretty cool! I haven't heard of it before, so it's original. I was a bit confused because I mixed them up with moon globes for a second, but I get it now.

Residence: IceWing Kingdom

Good

Appearance: Tranquil azure eyes sit lightly within Crystal's soft, rounded skull. Several small central horns sit atop its head, just above its ears. A row of small crystal growths runs down the sides of each of its jaw lines. Graceful pearl wings grow starting from its shoulders and end at the end of its shoulder blades. The wings are almost angel-like, the insides of the wing seem to be made of thin crystals and each bone structures ends in a curved, yet blunt tip. Its wide tail ends in a seemingly fluffy tip and is covered in the same stone-like scales as its cyan body.

Cool! The look fits her Tribe, and is very descriptive. I'm able to easily picture her. She seems very beautiful, I like this appearance!

Personality: Very independent and gets things done a week, maybe even month before it's due. Very loyal to Queen, and if there's a battle, there's Crystal. Loves making people laugh, yet very stubborn. Must have everything perfect, no matter what situation she's in. She knows when to say what, and knows how to talk dragons into things. Hates people who are selfish, absolutely HATES them.

This is mostly pretty good! "Independent" seems to be an underused personality trait. Loyalty is a bit overused, but I think in this case it works very well for her personality. My only issue is that she should have some more flaws. She seems to be a bit too perfect.

Family:
Mother- Silver
Father- Shard
Sister-Glaze(sister)
Brother- Blizzard

Ha, I have OCs named Silver and Blizzard. I like these names.

Backstory:
Crystal was the daughter of Silver and Shard, and the younger sister of Blizzard, and the older sister of Glaze. They were good and close friends with the Queen, and they all got along with everyone very well.
One day, her mother and father were on a secret mission, so Blizzard and Crystal looked after Glaze. Blizzard took a break and went to hang out with his Friends, and so Crystal was alone, taking care of Glaze. Then the Queen's most beloved dragon said the Crystal must be tired, and said he could look after Glaze while Crystal could take a break and take a nap. She agreed, and she went to sleep. When she woke up, Blizzard was looking for Glaze, saying she want here.
Then they found a note saying he was going to trade Glaze for orbs, so he could betray the queen. Blizzard and Crystal followed the footsteps of the dragon and rescued Glaze.
After this, Crystal hated selfish people, because she almost lost her sister because of that.
The siblings found out what their parents's secret mission was, which was to figure out who that dragon was who was trying to betray the queen, when it was actually the Queen's favorite dragon after all.
The Queen banished him from the tribe, and he later got killed because of trying to kill the queen.

Hmm. I like this, the story has one main plot, it isn't all over the place. Easy to follow. I expected this to be more about her being an orb collector, but this works too? I'm just curious about what happens to Crystal and her siblings after the traitor is killed.

Overall
9/10! I liked her a lot, but I think you could add a few more flaws to her personality. I know I always point this out in OCs, but it's important. Her backstory was a little confusing at first, but I got it :3