Author: no_kidding

Summary: "A villian intent on world domination

A weapon that can't be stopped.

Will heroesrise from the ashes of destruction?

Or will evil prevail?"

Reviewer's remarks: The story is appealing from the very first chapter - it begins with a surprisingly good action scene.

However the action scene that started happening in the first chapter ends only in the fourth chapter, when two of the four chapters are very small. It has annoyed me since after the first chapter I expected something new, something more common to usual people that would explain the situation.

Another problem that I'd like to point out is the unusual names that are hard to remember - it would be much easier to read if instead of Da-Xia there was Emily. On the other hand once I see the characters name (such as Da-Xia) I instantly remember the characters past and how it is associated with the story, so the names have and the good side.

Rating (out of five): 3

A note to the author: I was surprised to come across such a well-written action scene, but later on I expected more of a story telling time, what happened? Why? And you just kept on going with the action scene.

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/74966521-esh-mavet