Author: fuzzywarmslippers

Summary: "Kill her"

Reviewer's remarks: The story is very mysterious - in the begining we get to see a woman handing some money to a guy and after that we don't get any clue of what has happened there.

I struggled to read the story because the story has some complex sentences. Some words that are beeing used in the story aren't relevant these days.

The story is very well-written and you can feel the intensity while reading the story. In the future this story might have a lot of action scenes.

Rating (out of five): 4

A note to the author: You're a talented writer and I see that you're trying to do your best, but you're making it too perfect. You're crossing the line. Try softening your sentences and then your story will be great. Also, you must to update the description. From the description reader wants to know what kind of story it is and from your description you can't understand anything.

Link: http://my.w.tt/UiNb/mhJRfcu6Ku

Reviewer: Alan247