Author: TTBMBFF 

Summary: When Arielle gets kidnapped by her, she is introduced to a completely new world that changes her life forever.

A mate that is the strongest guard werewolf alive. The one that everybody fears. The one that has Arielle as a mate. Against her will, Arielle is taken away from her world and thrown into another world. A world where everything she imagined was real. A world where people into turned into beasts that could not be controlled.

But one day Arielle meets people she shouldn't have; people that have been after her for years. What happens when she discovers things she shouldn't have? What happens when old wounds are opened, betrayal is played and love is found?

Reviewer's Remarks: Please note that it is not my intention to criticise or be rude. I simply offer an honest review.

The Guard is a work of fiction, categorised as 'Paranormal'. It deals with werewolves, witches, vampires e.t.c. The main theme however are werewolves. I appreciate the author's endeavour at composing this ongoing work.

The summary offered about the work sounded appealing and the plot did have potential. Although, I have to point out a number of misconceptions such as the character development (specifically the female protagonist), incorrect use of grammar, flaws in the tenses and a few plot holes.

Firstly, the characters in the story - as a reader I wasn't offered much when it came to the characters. What I am attempting to inform is that the characters were bland and did not have their own distinct personality. Another aspect that bothered me was the portrayal of the female protagonist. Arielle - the main character - was portrayed as a stereotypical female character. She was such a Mary Sue. Literally, she was unable to fend for herself - always the 'feeble' mundane who hid behind Ace for her well-being.

Secondly, misconceptions in grammar and flaws in tenses. I comprehend that there are always minor misconceptions in works however I noted quite a few. These errors had an impact on my speed of reading and prevented me from focusing on the story. Also, paying attention to the tenses - as I have mentioned in a few other reviews - is vital. (note: three tenses: past, present, future - further categorised into four divisions: simple, continuous, perfect and perfect continuous.)

I was flustered when it came to the plot. I understand that Arielle was held captive by a pack of werewolves to foster their secret - but further into the story when they are seated in a diner her parents appear out of thin air. This made no sense to me - especially the part where when these strangers claimed to be her parents (let me add: with NO PROOF to support their said claim) she put her faith in them and made the (may I add ridiculous) decision to stay with them. And when they ended up being deranged characters she still did not question her decision or their motives. Then to top it off she discovers her long lost brother - she had no knowledge of his existence - in her 'parents' basement. Finally, Ace is the one to save her from these personages and then he decides that it is the optimum time to drop the bomb about the existence of supernatural beings - it wasn't like she was flabbergasted enough over the incident with her parents.

The story has potential, though - if it were to be edited by the author.

Rating (out of five): 2.75

A note to the author: The concept that you have come up with is intriguing and would no doubt encourage readers - however you must acknowledge the blunders in your work. It is advised that you sketch a vague mind map of your story - include plot details, character overviews, minor aspects which may help you. This will assist you in having a clear mindset as to how you want to proceed your story. Finally, editing is key to solving slips in grammar - you may ask others to assist you in going through your mistakes. If you wish to pursue a career of writing you must acknowledge your errors and work on them. I would also suggest attempting writing prompts regularly - this is how I managed to gradually improve my writing. However, I have observed major potential in your work.

Please note (again) that I have by no means intended to be rude but simply offer my honest feedback as I promised when composing these awards.

Link: http://my.w.tt/UiNb/lWFiCZ6Miu