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Summary: My smile falters as the next thought lands in my brain. "Not to sound dismal or anything, but I think you're lucky your parents let you pursue your own dreams." I tell him, truthfully. "These kind of things do not exist in my realm."

He snorts at my words, but speaks before I get offended. "Trust me, mine is no different than yours. My whole life has been planned out before I was even brought to life. "Where I'll study, who I'll be friends with, what my career will be, and even who I'll end up spending the rest of my days with." I listen, and get the feeling that if someone decides to write my biography when I'm dead, these exact lines would be the description on the back. ********** Money holds power over people. It's addictive, like a drug that always keeps you coming back for more. Once you're under its power, you lose control of your actions, principles, common sense, and mind peace. Your next step is to control people -to keep your money growing. And that's what has been going down in Ambrosia's family for generations on end. But she won't have it their way. She's a daydreamer, but dreaming is the limit. Straying from the assigned track means consequences. Will she put up a good fight with her parents? Will she give it all up? Or

Reviewer's remarks: Ultimate is an intriguing story but one I would recommend to readers who enjoy suspenseful and at times perplexing plots. The book has been marked under noteworthy due to its' immense potential. The plot is very appealing but again is restricted to an audience that enjoys the mystery factor. The introductory chapter is what drew me to the book although it didn't quite make sense after reading the summary. In other words it didn't have anything to do with the actual synopsis but I suppose it may have some significance later on in the book.

The story so far is well written although there are a handful of punctuation misconceptions which put off the reader and are at times confusing. But considering this is the author's first endeavor at composing a literary story - it's actually quite good. I haven't familiarized with the characters enough to determine an opinion about them but they seem pretty likable. The development and the story were fair although the story may need minor editing

Rating (out of five): 4

A note to the author: Like I said, I really enjoyed your work, apart from a handful of misconceptions. Also, I was really impressed when you said this was your first attempt at writing a story. My suggestion would be to keep writing in order to sharpen your writing skills and you could be on the road to becoming a writer someday!

Reviewer: Pluto_Planet